https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 16:25:35 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-55885 Sun, 23 Nov 2003 07:55:48 +0000
Oh yeah....in a couple places you have multiple plurals:
skeletons moves

tombstones moves  

Pretty minor stuff really.  
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MJBird https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-55885 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-55884 Sun, 23 Nov 2003 02:01:19 +0000 As someone who do not like scary movies it took me about half an hour to come up with the words to use, and a lot longer to stick with them. I
like the way you kinda force us to write in a perimeter. Difficult, yes. Fun, absolutely.
Hopefully by following your directions we'll get better at it. And hopefully you have some happier subjects coming up. LOL.
Olav]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Olav https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-55884 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-55883 Sat, 22 Nov 2003 01:54:50 +0000
What a difference.  Really colorful imagery, sucks you right in.  The power of this one dwarfs your original.

What do you think?

I've gotta tell you I'm impressed.

Nick]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-55883 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-1509 Sat, 22 Nov 2003 00:14:14 +0000 Decided to start all over and try to actually follow Nicks rules this time. Hopefully this is better than the last.
List of words:
Knife, bloody, dark, windy, chainsaw, shadow, tombstone, altar, morgue, grave, casket, skeleton, dead bodies, fire, spiders, rats, chains, chamber, full moon, sacrifice, scream, dark moon, night

V1
The ground cannot conceal the sound
As the grave cries out like a chainsaws scream
The birth of the night, bloody and vile
Eclipse darkens the full moon

The time has come when spiders gather
Amongst rats and amongst themselves
An old stone morgue casting fiery shadows
A chamber glazing bloody red

Chorus
As skeletons moves in the shadows
The ritual begins
The knife is placed on the altar
Bloody chains are locked in place
Unseen hands do the sacrifice
Life and death to celebrate

Fire flickers, tombstones moves
Caskets brings forth the guests
A celebration of a life
That soon will see its death

Dead bodies rise for the occasion
Windy rain carries their stench
The dark of the night covers their motions
As the celebration reaches its height.

Chorus
As skeletons moves in the shadows
The ritual begins
The knife is placed on the altar
Bloody chains are locked in place
Unseen hands do the sacrifice
Life and death to celebrate
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Olav https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-3-olav-take-two/#post-1509