https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 06:08:59 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56031 Wed, 03 Dec 2003 23:50:19 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56031 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56030 Wed, 03 Dec 2003 22:59:06 +0000
I kinda figured that I would tweak length and meter if and when I actually try to set it to music.  Is this the wrong approach?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group markyesme https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56030 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56029 Wed, 03 Dec 2003 20:55:50 +0000
Try bringing it all into the present tense.  It's okay if the story unfolds for the listener all at once.


It's a bit long too, can you condense it anywhere?  Remember we are thinking lyric here.

Nick
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56029 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56028 Sun, 30 Nov 2003 11:33:14 +0000 ]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MJBird https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-56028 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-1544 Sat, 29 Nov 2003 10:53:50 +0000
They know who I am
The trenchcoats talked to all my neighbors
And now they're coming after me
I was told to watch my mouth
Unfeeling eyes and nosy ears are everywhere
I thought that speech was free

Ask someone who loves me
How much it meant to me
Words were to be spoken
Ideas to be set free
They silenced me forever
A price I dearly paid
My voice would not be quiet
Now I live by what I said

They have me now in hand
The uniforms forced me to the ground
And they're going to take me in
I have the right to remain silent
Anything I say can be used against me
Paying for my words would begin

Ask someone who loves me
How much it meant to me
Words were to be spoken
Ideas to be set free
They silenced me forever
A price I dearly paid
My voice would not be quiet
Now I live by what I said

They are going to make me talk
The rolled-up sleeves were wet with sweat
Now they smash my fingers
Write my own confession?
They'll twist my words and break my spirit
The cost of death and pain lingers

Ask someone who loves me
How much it meant to me
Words were to be spoken
Ideas to be set free
They silenced me forever
A price I dearly paid
My voice would not be quiet
Now I live by what I said.

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group markyesme https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-4/#post-1544