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Major dittos on all thats been said already. Great song. I like the way you bring the girl in the frame to "life" at the end. Sure the character is a little psycho but I don"t see him as dangerous.

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-72081 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-72037 Fri, 08 Oct 2004 08:12:11 +0000
-- Scratch 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-72037 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-72030 Fri, 08 Oct 2004 06:01:25 +0000 the verses are all great, and the rhyming pattern, as vic said, shows that everything/everyone at the parties goes together (hence rhyme) and you dont, breaking the rhyme.
and i love the choruses. i cant quite get my head around the metaphor there... it strikes me as very clever, but it makes my head hurt :P maybe you look different, or are in different surronds, but still cling to an old memory...
anyways loved it
sozay]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sozay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-72030 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-72003 Fri, 08 Oct 2004 00:31:47 +0000
One of my favourite authors reckons the short story is harder to write than the novel. In a novel you throw words at somebody and hope they stick. In the short story you have to be more strategic in your use of words placing them in the pockets or behind the ear of the reader so they feel them.

I reckon in this song you've worked that particular kind of magic.

Great stuff (again) obviously the constraints worked well for you - beware next week :wink:

unnecessary conclaves of pretension - love the onomatopaeic feel to this line - superb stuff.


Bob]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-72003 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71980 Thu, 07 Oct 2004 22:42:04 +0000
I have to agree with Vic. Great song. I especially dig the "two dimensions ..... deeper than most"lines. Very clever. So short and simple and yet complete. Great effort.

TheJackal.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group TheJackal https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71980 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71976 Thu, 07 Oct 2004 22:31:02 +0000 ...this song kinda has a creepy fool to it for me. like a psycho, norman bates ... kinda feel. Weird. when I was proof-reading this before I posted it, I thought "That could be Norman Bates singing this." I almost said as much in my initial post, but then I thought, "Maybe no one else will notice it, maybe it's just me... etc...." Dang. Oh well. The guy was supposed to come across as an outcast, but more like a "steppenwolf" kinda character,not a full blown psycho. Oh well. Try again next week.

-- Scratch 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71976 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71929 Thu, 07 Oct 2004 10:31:10 +0000
i was waiting to see your take on this week's assignment. and of course you did a wonderful job even if you did cheat. how dare you! we both( and a lot of others) know you are better than that. :wink:
with not enough Coke and a little too much Bacardi.I don't care if you've just two dimensions,
you're deeper than the people I'd meet therethe pretty girl without a name, who lives within my framei have to stop before i quote the whole song. you always manage to amaze me with what you come up with each week. your work is always consitantly good, i don't think there has been one since i started comming here that i haven't fully enjoyed reading. your work is never pretentious, trying to be something bigger than it is, always fairly straight forward, and you manage to pack so much emotion into such simply put lines. i never have to read your work over and over again to understand it. if i wanted to read something 10 times in order to understand it, i would go and read poetry. :wink: :lol: you never disapoint. enough of that for now. although i know how much you love it. :wink: i can't help myself sometimes

it is nice to see the broad range of ideas that people have come up with for this week. none of them are even close to being similar. i guess the more the topic makes us think the better we all are at being different.

this song kinda has a creepy fool to it for me. like a psycho, norman bates talking to his mother kinda feel. where do you come up with these ideas? i like the way you change up the chorus each time. makes a nice added touch since the chorus is so short. still aware of the cheating going on in your song *shakes her headin dissapointment* the chorus is great.

i think i have finally said enough. i am sure people are sick and tired by the end of this post about hearing me go on and on about your work.

keep up the good work, like you could do/post anything but.

your biggest fan,
-CheapThrill

should have been sleeping instead of gushing so much over scratch's work. now i'm not going to get to bed till after 2:30am]]> Sunday Songwriters Group CheapThrill https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71929 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71922 Thu, 07 Oct 2004 09:11:42 +0000
Answer's clear......working hard on a song.......!!!

It was worth it, think this may be your best yet.......I like the slightly unusual format, three lines with the same rhyme, then a fourth that sort of says, "Ah, so what.....!"

Also like the way you changed the chorus slightly each time.

Parties are a curious convention,
unnecessary conclaves of pretension
I don't care if you've just two dimensions,
you're deeper than the people I'd meet there.

That's a real killer verse!

Great job!!! .......wouldn't change a thing.

:D :D :D

Vic.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-71922 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-4219 Thu, 07 Oct 2004 08:48:52 +0000 think?

Picture Perfect


I can hear down the hall they're having a party.
with not enough Coke and a little too much Bacardi.
The music's loud the laughter's long and hearty.
But I think I'll just stay right here with you.


I know some folks think it's strange, but I see no need to change
the photograph that came, with my new picture frame.


I've never really been a social person,
and when I try the situation worsens,
So I'll stay with this beer I'm slowly nursing,
enraptured by your picture perfect smile.


And though people think it's strange I see no need to change
the picture of the girl that came with my new gilded frame.


Parties are a curious convention,
unnecessary conclaves of pretension
I don't care if you've just two dimensions,
you're deeper than the people I'd meet there.


Everybody thinks I'm strange, but I have no need to change
the pretty girl without a name, who lives within my frame.

-- Scratch 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-48-picture-perfect/#post-4219