https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 22:41:05 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56119 Thu, 01 Jan 2004 07:23:25 +0000 Kept me interested till the end.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MJBird https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56119 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56118 Thu, 25 Dec 2003 00:00:11 +0000 I like the lyrics, but i'd love to hear the melody.
I LOVE the last verse! keep on writing!!!!!!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MarcM https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56118 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56117 Tue, 23 Dec 2003 07:56:24 +0000
(and this isn't really a crticism per se, but the first image that comes to my mind when you say 'fearful pants' is a cowering pair of blue jeans  ;D)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Alpaca_Turned_Blue https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56117 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56116 Mon, 22 Dec 2003 14:07:50 +0000
The chorus could use a little bit of rewording, I think. But its still good.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group PsYcHoNIK https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-56116 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-1574 Sun, 21 Dec 2003 06:47:31 +0000
Here's my hand at an elemental song- not just featuring, but pretty much starring and revolving around the elements. Tell me what you think.

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Elemental Lullaby

Fire fire burning brightly
Burn my soul down to the core
Soothe me inside warm me out
I feel your flames and I want more

Air air rock me slow
Like I was held by mother's arms
When I don't feel safe anymore
You protect me from all harm

(Chorus)
When I feel trapped, panicked and blue
Think the floor will open and I'll fall through
Fearful pants and lonely sighs
Dissapear with this elemental lullaby

Water water enter here
I take you willingly inside
You hands of blue keep me calm
Make me feel like I don't have to hide

Earth earth give me steady life
When I'm disappearing I'll be found
Doesn't matter where or when
You make my feet set on the ground

(Chorus)

Earth, water, air and fire
Come and lift my spirit higher
Water, earth, fire and air
Take me high and hold me there

(Chorus)

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Here's hoping for some good feedback!
-Alex]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SilverMoon https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-8-silvermoon/#post-1574