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If I tell my kids to draw me a circle and they draw a great square, well you get the idea...]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55900 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55899 Sun, 23 Nov 2003 07:19:10 +0000

In the second verse..I really liked this line...

My footstep cant be heard
No imprint to be found

But what followed didn't seem to carry the image
any further....which would have been great.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MJBird https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55899 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55898 Fri, 21 Nov 2003 02:05:13 +0000
It's an exercise.  Go get that imagery... ;D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55898 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55897 Fri, 21 Nov 2003 01:16:42 +0000
Cool how you can get yourself to think somewhat like he does,  ;D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group RoblesRolo https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55897 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55896 Fri, 21 Nov 2003 01:08:00 +0000
60 seconds, name as many things as you can that you'd see in horror movies.

It's a good framework.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55896 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55895 Thu, 20 Nov 2003 20:08:43 +0000 Yes you have been of great help.
I do agree with the suggestions you gave me and I will change it to that. Thanks for your input
And no I am not that Olav from Torvunds site.
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Olav https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55895 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55894 Thu, 20 Nov 2003 14:45:02 +0000
V1
I roam in the shadows
Covered by your fear
In the darkness of your heart
There my evil can appear
Deception is my choice
Of  the hate I bring out
I can torture your life
With the spirit of doubt.

(Repeating evil in such short intervals doesn't wok for me)

V2
My footstep cant be heard
No imprint to be found
Youve heard of my deeds  
In the story of old  
No life to be found  
In Hades abyss
No hope for redemption  
if the fire persists

(the new last line now reflects a whole different feel to that verse and helps it flow with the complete song and its mood)

Chorus is fine and impressive but for the first line where you use "spirit" again. So I'd suggest "In flesh I prey
On the weak and the lost .."

The 3rd verse is fine. I don't think you'd need any changes there.

Hope I've been of some help :)





]]> Sunday Songwriters Group alterego https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-55894 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-1515 Tue, 18 Nov 2003 01:09:42 +0000 Lost souls  Darkness   Hell  Condemnation  Evil  Shadows   Hades  Death  Eternal  No hope  Fear  Spirit    End of time  Beginning of time  Redemption  Kill  Destroy  Abyss
I think there are three of the words that I did not use.
No title yet.
Olav

V1
I roam in the shadows
Covered by your fear
In the darkness of your heart
There my evil can appear
Deception is my choice
Of  the evil I bring out
I can torture your life
With the spirit of doubt.

V2
My footstep cant be heard
No imprint to be found
Youve heard of my deeds
In the story of old
No life to be found
In Hades abyss
No hope for redemption
In the fire exist

Chorus
In spirit I prey
On the weak and the lost
Cant destroy the souls
For which the Lamb paid the cost
What He allows
Is as far as I can go
A war Ill never win
Due to Calvarys blood.

V3
Somewhere in the shadows
There I lie in wait
Searching for your doubt
With deception as my bait
Lies hide the cost
Of the price you will  pay
Eternal condemnation
In the darkness of hell

Chorus:
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Olav https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week3-olav/#post-1515