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Very nice Mp3. I like the vocals it gives it a certain moodiness.

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-112417 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-112385 Wed, 20 Jul 2005 03:16:40 +0000 In Tragedy I think the chorus is very good. My first comment is that I'm not sure I understand what its about. My take on it is it's about a lover who is about to, or has just been jilted ? Thanks. Yeah, it could be about that. I was just intending it to be about an argument where one lover is refusing to come to the table, as it were. But that would apply perfectly to getting jilted, where the other lover out-and-out declares that they're never coming to the table.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-112385 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-112384 Wed, 20 Jul 2005 03:12:57 +0000
The Celt,
I like to know what you had in mind musically for this I finally got around to recording it. The vocals aren't all that clear, but it'll give you an idea of what I was thinking. (I think I should have used a capo. :D ):

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/3/growland_music.htm


Pbee,
for me the "face time" detracts a bit cos it's a little common in comparison to the rest. You're right. Unfortunately for me, the line as it is communicates exactly what I wanted. So for now I'm thinking:

If you'll breathe life back into flooded lungs
At least I taste your lips 'til I revive

It's not as accurate, but it fits the song better. I'll have to keep an open eye for a line that will do both. BTW, I've recorded the song with the new version of that line.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-112384 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-111978 Mon, 18 Jul 2005 00:39:46 +0000
yeah I like both of these too. Personally I prefer the first one, I like the parallel's that you draw.

In Tragedy I think the chorus is very good. My first comment is that I'm not sure I understand what its about. My take on it is it's about a lover who is about to, or has just been jilted ?

The second point is that because I really like the poetic nature of the lines you've written throughout the song this line:
At least we'd have some face time 'til I revive
for me the "face time" detracts a bit cos it's a little common in comparison to the rest.

Overall a good job here :D .

pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-111978 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-111937 Sun, 17 Jul 2005 17:33:32 +0000
I like both alot.

The chorus on Tradgedy is GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
How can we avoid this trajedy
When all the actors quit the stage
Left alone in the dusty spot light
Lord, I hate soliloques It's not easy to use a word like "soliloques "so well

I like to know what you had in mind musically for this

Seems to me that All the World's a Stage
would cover week 35 as well.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-111937 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-10334 Sun, 17 Jul 2005 07:08:04 +0000 Tragedy.


Tragedy

Slow down, watch the sun set on a perfect day
We'll never see it shine this way again,
Fire ripping through the clouds like scissors
Making holes where my face used to be

Hold down, my head below the water's surface
I'll pay the price to lift this bloody curse
If you'll breathe life back into flooded lungs
At least we'd have some face time 'til I revive


How can we avoid this trajedy
When all the actors quit the stage
Left alone in the dusty spot light
Lord, I hate soliloques


Hoe down, square dance with your cruel intentions
Wall flower, couldn't break in if I dared to
You lead, step on my toes if you like
Just free a slow dance for us before we say good-night

Roll on, tumble weed what you reduce to
Dried out, tangled ball of former bouquets
Somewhere past your teeth a smile waits to save to day
If you would speak into the scene in which I have no lines


Feeling scripted
You don't have to read those lies
No conviction
Can I ask for one more try


How can we avoid this trajedy
When all the actors quit the stage
Left alone in the dusty spot light
Lord, I hate soliloques




All the World's a Stage

Just around the corner from broadway
Half a world away
Ink well spewing out tired lines
Well's run dry how will we feed the children?

2nd floor apartment
Dirt floor, mud brick, drafty, leaky, shanty
Writing jingles to pay the rent
Scratching rock hard soil

Reaching for a raison d'etre to give the page
Searching for motive to leave the hut today


All the world's a stage
Spotlight falls let your light shine
All the world's a cage
Getting comfortable in your confines
All the world's a grave
We've seen better days
Life is what it is
Face it with me
Into the 'come what may'.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-36-tragedy/#post-10334