https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 22:24:42 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79324 Sat, 11 Dec 2004 10:24:16 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79324 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79323 Sat, 11 Dec 2004 10:19:26 +0000
too bad i didn't get a chance to comment before the song died. but i do want to say that i liked it and liked where it was going. hopefully a pheniox will rise from these ashes in the near future.

-CheapThrill]]> Sunday Songwriters Group CheapThrill https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79323 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79233 Fri, 10 Dec 2004 20:30:15 +0000
1. The axiom, "Write what you know" from Nick's article... I haven't been inside a bar for around 20 years now. So I'm trying to describe interactions and scenes from memory, and it's not working very well.

2. The idea for the song is a knock-off. It occurred to me last night, that MarvelousOptimist wrote this same idea last year, in a song called "Smoke and Mirrors." Only he did it really well. Probably one of my favorite pieces of his. You can't find it here though,... it got wiped out in the doin's.

Ja'mir, I really like your suggestions for a third verse, and may incorporate them into another song in the future. (I've written them down in the notebook, lest I forget)

Or, I may try to revive this one sometime in the future, in a different contextual framework.

Thanks for all the ideas / suggestions / kudos / critiques. I did actually consider all of them.

-- Scratch 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79233 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79150 Fri, 10 Dec 2004 09:16:54 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Taintedpoet https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79150 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79066 Thu, 09 Dec 2004 18:42:59 +0000
the second verse is dam.n beautiful

She really doesn't like him
but she figures he'll do
to keep the cold at bay
for another night or two.

awesome! love it, not only because you used the expression 'keep.. at bay' which I adore since I first heard it in a Moneybrother song a couple of months ago;) really my favourite part of your song yet.

as for the chorus I like either of the suggestions that were made.
give them a second to switch masks.

I personally would like to see a 3rd verse heading in the same direction like the second(only regarding the mood) because I feel like otherwise it would be better to change second and third verse so the second verse would be the last one, as it would make a quite good ending, at least it leaves me with a cool kinda sad but not sad feeling;)

I dunno... but I'll be pleased to see whatever you make out of this:)
good luck
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79066 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79032 Thu, 09 Dec 2004 12:59:30 +0000
It's very compelling, I hope you write a third verse, can't wait to read it.

"they'll be anyone you ask, they'll just change their mask"
I agree the song would be better with this addition, but, to critize to critics, "they'll be anyone you ask, they'll just wear a different mask" might fit in better with the rhythm.

Maybe a third verse could be about the "she" from the second verse who in desperation tries to throw off her mask and be honest for once, but the "he" from the first verse doesn't understand her honesty and she gets hurt again.
Just a thought...

Keep in touch ;-)
Christiaan]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Christiaan https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-79032 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-78969 Thu, 09 Dec 2004 00:47:30 +0000
Well different people have different perspectives I'm definetly different because I like the chorus sorry GJ and Jamir .

Scratch I love your second verse I will looking to see how you finish this I think it's pretty damn good

cheers]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-78969 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-78958 Thu, 09 Dec 2004 00:18:29 +0000
BE pleased with it! It's good...

so far.


I agree it feels like just a start. So far you've been sort of simmering, and maybe something could boil over in the final verse??

I like where it going so far though - a good, different, use of 'Game Faces'.

Keep it coming!
G]]> Sunday Songwriters Group gjbrake https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-78958 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-78948 Wed, 08 Dec 2004 23:55:27 +0000
Well a difficult piece here !!!!!!!, over all i like the idea but agree it needs another verse. i also have a problem with the end of the chorus



Verse 1 and 2 are great I would not change a thing there, and the first part of the chorus is fine , in the second half I would bring in the mask idea again, it just seems to round it off for me


Game faces
They've been hurt so many times
that they've practiced all their lines
they'll be anyone you ask, they'll just change their mask .


as for a verse 3

I would delve down the road of a clown with tears and a happy smile, or a hobo who is really a sad lonely millionaire who has no real friends, play around with the opposites, and think of the masks people really wear to bring out the sentiment, for example I am an introvert who becomes an extrovert to play out and sing in public, we all wear so many masks !!!! Think of yours or someone elses you recognize well and make it real to blend in with the first two verses....

I look forward to the re read !!!!!!!!

Go well
Ja'mir
:wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-78948 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-5433 Wed, 08 Dec 2004 23:41:49 +0000

Game Faces
==========


The light's a little brighter
than it was when he came in
not so bright that anyone
could see the scars within
The players shuffle through the door
and amble to their places
order up a round or two
and put on their game faces.


Game faces
It's not safe for you to know
who they really are, and so
they just hide behind a mask.
Game faces
They've been hurt so many times
that they've practiced all their lines
they'll be anyone you ask.


She has another daquiri
and looks around at him
the chill outside is not as cold
as the chill she feels within
She really doesn't like him
but she figures he'll do
to keep the cold at bay
for another night or two.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3-week-5-game-faces/#post-5433