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I actually heard Elliott Smith singing this as I read it, so your on track there. :D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group E.Sherman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-107016 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-107013 Fri, 17 Jun 2005 03:07:54 +0000
And so he'll be leaving soon
To fly over the moon
With the help of the spoon

which twists a nursery rhyme into a pseudo drug reference that began with 'pinned up in the corner'... but i thought that chorus sounded a bit daft. and i dont know that that really clarifies thaaat much

soz]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sozay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-107013 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-107010 Fri, 17 Jun 2005 02:57:29 +0000
pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-107010 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-107009 Fri, 17 Jun 2005 02:51:37 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group sozay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-107009 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106986 Thu, 16 Jun 2005 23:27:36 +0000
It “might not set the world on fire” but there's a neat technique in here that I really like, and that's the way you've mixed the “So he goes” in the last bit – cool. I think it is a bit vague though; I'm not sure where he's going, so to speak. If the story is about an unfinished sketch and the way it calls out to be finished, then I think there's more to the story that your not telling us , but that's what Id like to hear. There's real potential here in my opinion, good work :D .

pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106986 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106902 Thu, 16 Jun 2005 08:47:25 +0000
This might mean nothing to you, but it's offered for what it's worth. I personally don't mind inscrutable lyrics as long as they aren't pretentious, which these most certainly are not. I often wish I could write those sorts of lyrics, but I can't...

Hope this is useful as feedback
Cheers
JMcC]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Dr W G Grace https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106902 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106862 Thu, 16 Jun 2005 03:20:12 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group sozay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106862 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106665 Wed, 15 Jun 2005 03:28:04 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group sozay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106665 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106563 Tue, 14 Jun 2005 05:38:22 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Dr W G Grace https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-106563 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-9653 Tue, 14 Jun 2005 03:31:58 +0000

Quick Sketch

He sits, slouched, pinned up in the corner
Face like a quick sketch
Rough, scratched, endless work in progress
Wants to be finished

So he goes
So he goes
So he goes
So he goes

His body hangs from his head like an afterthought
Keeps his head out of the clouds as he walks
Down a shortcut, he know all the ways
To get to the place, to buy his mind space

So he goes
So he goes
So he goes
So he goes

He sits, slouched, pinned up in the corner
Face like a quick sketch
Wants to be finished
So he goes
Wants to be finished
So he goes
Wants to be finished
So he goes
(repeat to fade)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sozay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg3w32-quick-sketch/#post-9653