https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 12:26:15 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151488 Fri, 13 Jan 2006 03:26:21 +0000
Great Job!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151488 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151213 Thu, 12 Jan 2006 05:53:35 +0000
Well the jury's out (excuse the pun), this is a good song. The last verse is certainly great and I agree with David that you could use it as a chorus.

Nice job,

Cheers
Pbee]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151213 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151167 Thu, 12 Jan 2006 01:45:20 +0000
:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151167 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151164 Thu, 12 Jan 2006 01:36:46 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151164 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151146 Thu, 12 Jan 2006 00:45:27 +0000
Happy New Year and it's great to see you back at the SSG!

I agree with Bob that the last verse is terrific. I was thinking you might even make it your chorus, sticking it in between the other three verses. You could even make the title Walkin The Thin Blue Line.

Looking forward to seeing more of your material this upcoming year.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151146 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151141 Thu, 12 Jan 2006 00:34:25 +0000
Great use of imagery throughout. I like the the use of everyday terminology in an out of the ordinary situation.

Last verse is a killer

Excellent stuff

Bob :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-151141 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-14524 Wed, 11 Jan 2006 23:34:09 +0000
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I'm fully strapped, got my bulletproof flak
another go-round huntin' hillbillies & smack
got my baited traps, now I'll wait for the snap
keep the earplugs ready for when they howl "entrapped"

tonight it's a beat up Impala, out of state plates
a real Rhodes scholar, runnin' a little late
got an open container and he's carring weight
a trunkful enough to make him the next Bill Gates

tomorrow's the same, 'cept maybe a Subaru
the wheelmen all clones, drop-out rented mules
a carful of product, runnin' a red light or two
and you can bank on hearing "it's my 1st time thru"

it's the same old same old, your typical 9 to 5
you punch in you punch out, in between all the lies
you can say what you want cause I can't be surprised
I've seen it all, walkin' the thin blue line]]> Sunday Songwriters Group P0RR https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-10/#post-14524