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My first thought on reading was, in verse one, what have piano keys got to do with rainbows ? and it wasn't until the chorus that the “penny dropped” . I know you dont want to give it away too soon but the way it reads to me is that there are two points being made here. If you could tie the rainbow line back to the piano, for me that would work nicely.

Maybe something like:
Forever staring at piano keys
Preservation of memories
The rainbow tones of yesterday
Already grey Other than that I like what I see. The chorus is great.
I look forward to hearing it.

pbee]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-11-black-white/#post-152516 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-11-black-white/#post-152426 Mon, 16 Jan 2006 16:40:20 +0000
As a song lyric, I think this stands pretty well. It unfolds very nicely, giving a piece of itself with the reading of each verse and the bridge nicely ties things together. Love the second verse, by the way! Great image.

The "green" chorus, though, has this line:
I'm not saying that you're out of sight Which seems a little out of place. I mean, she's obviously out of sight, right?

Anyway, even though it repeats a rhyme, you might go with:

"I'm not saying who's wrong or right..."

or even repeat the line from the "blue" chorus. Color-coded choruses! What did Bob get us into?

Looking forward to more.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-11-black-white/#post-152426 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-11-black-white/#post-14697 Mon, 16 Jan 2006 14:53:12 +0000


Forever staring at piano keys
Preservation of memories
The rainbow skies of yesterday
Already grey


I'm not saying that I'm feeling blue
I'm not saying that I'm missing you
I'm not saying that I ain't alright
(But ever since you left me girl)
I can only see the world in black and white
I can only see the world in black and white


I bought a paper to kill some time
Could only read between the lines
Newsprint smeared upon my hands
Words melted away


Was it a case of yang and yin?
Was it because I've got lighter skin?
Was I too slow to let you in?
That's just my way


I'm not saying that I'm seeing red
I'm not saying that I'm off my head
I'm not saying that it's every night
(But ever since you left me girl)
I can only see the world in black and white
I can only see the world in black and white
Yeah I only see the world in black and white
I can only see the world in black and white


I needed you
I thought that you could see
But you went and pulled the plug
On the brand new coloured-in me


I'm not saying that the grass ain't green
I'm not saying things that I don't mean
I'm not saying that you're out of sight
(But ever since you left me girl)
I can only see the world in black and white
I can only see the world in black and white
Yeah I only see the world in black and white
I can only see the world in black and white




I can only see the world in black and white
I only see the world in black and white baby
I can only see the world in black and white
Yeah I only see the world in black and white]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-11-black-white/#post-14697