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Good interpretation of the assignment - works well although powdered stake is an odd expression but I can see where you're going.

Good stuff

Bob :twisted:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170952 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170469 Thu, 06 Apr 2006 18:59:45 +0000
A few comments:

-in the first verse, I don't know what you gain by using both 'taken' and 'takes'. Makes it read rather awkwardly for me.

-a powdered stake, what is that? Some kind of "just add water" anti-vampire kit comes to mind.... ???

-again, where you contrast warm & worn in two similar lines... I feel that this nuance would probably be lost on the listener, unless you really overpronounced both words. Even if they do hear the difference, the two statements are not the most earth-shattering of contrasts (there are other songs that do this much better - just changing one word slightly to totally alter the meaning of the line).

I give one out of two thumbs up. :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170469 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170418 Thu, 06 Apr 2006 07:20:23 +0000
cheers

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170418 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170388 Thu, 06 Apr 2006 03:02:14 +0000 Yeah I'm referring to their lives together, doesn't quite work does it. Maybe
“Do you remember us “ would be better. How about:

Remember our life]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170388 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170369 Wed, 05 Apr 2006 23:56:35 +0000 Hilch, I'm not sure exactly how long it would be cos I haven't a really spent much time on the music or arrangement. I do have a chord progression for the verses and an idea for the chorus but at the moment all I have is a 2 verse snippet that I recorded in order to write the song to and get the metre right. I guess I could always post that up.
Joe, despite the label its not meant to be depressing, there are literally millions of people out there that are living fulfilling lives thanks to anti-depressants, and I say good for them, sometimes you need a little help. Remember those lives Yeah I'm referring to their lives together, doesn't quite work does it. Maybe
“Do you remember us “ would be better.
As for the music see above.

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170369 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170318 Wed, 05 Apr 2006 17:20:21 +0000 Remember those lives Are you referring to their lives together or someone else?

Lines of peace worn upon your face
There's a peace that's warm upon your face My favorite line. That's really good. What no music yet? You? C'mon Paul, you're slackin'.

Joe

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170318 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170277 Wed, 05 Apr 2006 10:08:09 +0000
Yeah Pbee I like this alot , only one thing I saw wrong was the length I suppose I just wanted more ...( greedy little me )

Would to hear how you will do ana arrangment for this


Nice mate very nice]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-170277 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg4-week-22-depression/#post-16841 Wed, 05 Apr 2006 02:44:58 +0000
Depression
© Copyright 2006 Paul Brady


Its like I don't know you
Yet I see you every day
It's got a hold your mind
It's taken your heart and soul away
Takes your heart and soul away

Its like you don't know me
You belong in that other world
I'm not on your mind
It's the beast that feeds on you each day
Takes your heart and soul away

Remember our life
Before this began
Now controlled by fears' obsession
Reach for hope
In a powdered stake
A desperate bid to kill depression

Its as I remember
You've come back from that other place
But you pay the price
Lines of peace worn upon your face
There's a peace that's warm upon your face

Remember our life
Before this began
Lost control to fears' obsession
Reach for hope
In a powdered stake
Kill the beast and take possession



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