https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 07:15:19 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126271 Mon, 19 Sep 2005 20:23:06 +0000 http://www.rhymezone.com

There is a rhyming dictionary there, although it's by no means exhaustive and some of the rhymes are kind of a stretch.

This is something (not that I recommend, just a different way to put things) that I got from looking at it. The verse changes from:
Sitting in the train
After a hard day of work
Some more happiness I gain
After one look at the sky to
Sitting in the train
After a hard day of work
I am happy once again
After one look at the sky It's kind of a cliche line, but it seems to fit (in my mind anyway..YMMV). I'm sure you can come up with something better though :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group gunslinger https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126271 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126250 Mon, 19 Sep 2005 18:56:36 +0000
I'm at school now, but I'll try that drum machine ASAP.

And as for submitting only a voice recording... I feel like I can't sing well, either with or without a guitar part. So yeah, this way you are free to critise it, knowing how I've meant the lyrics.

Hmmm, the happiness I gain part... It's something I wanted to put in there, as it's true for me. I'm getting a bus at 7.15 every morning, and looking at the sky always cheers me up... I'll try and find some other way to express that, without trying to rhyme :P]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Karla https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126250 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126179 Mon, 19 Sep 2005 13:19:23 +0000
I knew someone would mention it, and i almost got out of bed last night to edit my post. :shock:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Taver https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126179 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126168 Mon, 19 Sep 2005 11:53:52 +0000
I dont really have any critique for this. Great job :D

Geoo]]> Sunday Songwriters Group geoo https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126168 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126127 Mon, 19 Sep 2005 06:26:08 +0000
I'd never have the nerve to sing unaccompanied like that. But I thought it was a very good way to get your song across while you were thinking about the guitar part. To be honest, lots of lyrics here never get a guitar part written, so singing it was a great idea and gave us all the feel of your words as a song.

Singing alone like that is a heck of a lot harder than it seems, and I thought you did a good job. One of the bits I find hard is hitting the right note at the start of a verse, without a musical cue. And I thought you did that bit well. A few wobbles, but why not? It did the job and sold the song. :)

The words told the story in a gentle wistful way that I think lots of people could relate to. The only line that I stumbled on a bit was "Some more happiness I gain" which seemed a bit lumpy (lumpy???!).

Good job. :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Chris C https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126127 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126050 Mon, 19 Sep 2005 01:17:50 +0000
I think you should try some of your own advise that you gave to chris_c. You might find it handy to sing something you know very well, and record that. Compare it to the original, where do you go wrong? High notes, low notes, rhythms That said i think theres a good voice waiting to come out, try singing with more confidence and really let it out.

gunslinger thats a handy little drum machine, just downloaded it and gave it a try thanks.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Taver https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126050 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126042 Sun, 18 Sep 2005 23:59:36 +0000
I play with it until I get a sound I like, then I export it all to a .wav file, then import it into Audacity.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group gunslinger https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126042 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126040 Sun, 18 Sep 2005 23:41:01 +0000 a) the way I pronounce "and"
b) grammar... where they have come from or where they had come from? (gotta hate all those tenses :twisted:)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Karla https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-126040 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-11796 Sun, 18 Sep 2005 23:33:39 +0000 Just floating by
Those clouds in the sky
Making me wonder why
And where they'd come from

Sitting in the train
After a hard day of work
Some more happiness I gain
After one look at the sky

Just floating by
Those clouds in the sky
Making me wonder why
And where they had come from

Standing on my porch
Some thoughts get hold of me
I wonder why I am alone
Under this heavenly sky

Dreaming too much
About the things that went by
And about you my lad
Are you looking at it too?

Just floating by
Those clouds in the sky
Making me wonder why
And where they'd come from

Just floating by
Those clouds in the sky
Making me wonder why
And where they'd come from

Looking your way
I wish I could make you stay
But your work is calling
Making me wait one more day

I want to show you
To look up when you're down
That beauty is always there
To get you up high

Just floating by
Those clouds in the sky
Making me wonder why
And where they'd come from

You've read all this! Applause for you ;)
Okay, here's the thing. I've recorded some singing of this. But. I've been trying Audacity to copy and paste and delete and who knows what more (never tried it before). I'm curious if that's very obvious to you. Also I'd love to get some tips on how to add some drums or so (I don't even know how to create it on my pc, not even a simple base drum...) Gotta think about some guitar parts to go with it, haven't got time for it now as I've got a hell of a lot to do for school :( while I've spent too much time on this already... But I'll try to add that later :)

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=380008]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Karla https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg46-floating-by/#post-11796