https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 03:39:46 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271737 Wed, 21 Nov 2007 00:42:58 +0000 David]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Fraydoc https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271737 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271439 Sat, 17 Nov 2007 19:08:33 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group DrunkRock https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271439 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271088 Wed, 14 Nov 2007 03:58:32 +0000 "Your barn and house will disappear into the land" give me the impression of simply decaying away. It is much more than just about urban sprawl: themes include the flight of young people to the city; rising economic pressures; decay of family control; and of course, the threat of suburbanites (in more than one way).
My only other comment would be the her in the chorus
Would something like the land or the farm work better? I don't think so; besides, most men refer to special material items as "her". You know "MY favourite guitar, she WAILS!". Besides, land and farm are less romantic words...it's harder to get attached to them.

I wil revise and comment on the other points later on. Now I need to write a dendro paper. Thanks folks!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DrunkRock https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271088 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271013 Tue, 13 Nov 2007 19:12:15 +0000
A line I thnk could be better (as David pointed out) is . . . And of trucks and guns he's a mystery Perhaps somethng like:
to him livestock and crops're a mystery
(perhaps too many syllables but you see what I mean :) ).

My only other comment would be the her in the chorus
Would something like the land or the farm work better?

Nice work
Cheers
Ola]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Montezuma https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-271013 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-270894 Mon, 12 Nov 2007 21:26:10 +0000
My only comment would be on the end of the third verse. Up to then, it's a fight against urban sprawl, but
"Your barn and house will disappear into the land" give me the impression of simply decaying away.

maybe something like

No old man, you can't win at all
Your family farm will be the next shopping mall]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Jerboa https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-270894 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-270846 Mon, 12 Nov 2007 04:11:46 +0000
Some, though, reads a little rough. As always, this may work itself out when sung, so the final call will be when you find yourself setting it to music (if you haven't done so already).

The last two lines of the first verse, for example:

Running the farm, your sons don't want to try
And global warming's causing your fields to fry

Both of these are important images, but run together like this makes it a hard read. It makes more sense to have the first simply be "...Running the farm, your sons don't want..." and then try to come up with something for the final line.

Likewise this line in the second verse (love the last two lines, by the way):

And of trucks and guns he's a mystery

While it's easy to understand what you mean, it's not what you're saying. So you run the danger of someone not getting it if they only hear the line sung once.

The first two lines of the third verse are going straight into my "wish I'd written that" bag!

Looking forward to more!

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-270846 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-28880 Sun, 11 Nov 2007 05:16:24 +0000
Prairie Tragedy

It's getting hard to make a buck
When you need diesel for tractor and truck
And the government takes all your wheat
And at night its hard for you too sleep
Running the farm, your sons don't want to try
And the state you're in makes your daughter cry

Let her die
Let her die
Let the fields grow over
Let her die
Let her die
Let the city takeover

Yeah, your daughter married a city boy
A man more concerned with cell phones and toys
To him the farmer is just history
He can't be trusted with your legacy
Developers are coming to you every day
Offers get bigger everytime, what can you say

Let her die
Let her die
Let the fields grow over
Let her die
Let her die
Let the city takeover

No one will miss you poor farmer
Even your neighbors are accountants and lawyers
And the suburban mom down the street
Suing you about the beef that she eats
No you can't win my good man
Your homestead will recede into the land

Let her die
Let her die
Let the fields grow over
Let her die
Let her die
Let the city takeover]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DrunkRock https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-2-prairie-tragedy/#post-28880