https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 14:35:14 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/paged/2/#post-285536 Thu, 20 Mar 2008 06:37:30 +0000
But it's good to see you back!

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/paged/2/#post-285536 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285515 Thu, 20 Mar 2008 04:06:12 +0000
If this is only your second "story" song, -- well done. I haven't had time to listen to anything, but I like the writing. I can see merit in all the suggestions, as well as the original. It is interesting trying to tap into another person's style. The week's half over, but maybe I'll give this one a go.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285515 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285486 Thu, 20 Mar 2008 01:52:49 +0000 a fantastic job sir, sounds just how I imagined it would. I like the little tweaks you have made with the lyrics, well done

cheers
Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285486 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285467 Wed, 19 Mar 2008 23:39:49 +0000
Like it a lot. Only thing I would suggest is going to the "V" chord (D?) on the second line of the verses. Might give it a little more movement.

Nicely done!

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285467 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285464 Wed, 19 Mar 2008 23:21:53 +0000 pretty much just hanging around the house:

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6374033

I did make some minor changes but stayed with the first person third verse.

Hope you approve Paul

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285464 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285284 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 16:18:22 +0000 I couldn't even define MY writing style - since joining the SSG, I've done blues, rock, hard rock, country, fingerpicked ballads, folk, pop......

So yeah, I'm struggling - haven't even started yet. I thought Celt might be an obvious choice for me - we both seem to do a lot of blues, yet there's a folky twist in there .... but that didn't work out! Ah well, back to the drawing board....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285284 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285274 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 12:30:11 +0000
Something different in the fact you don't have music for this , I told you I was a bad influence :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

I like this a lot , tells a very nice story , now I suppose I have to say "John record it " :lol: :lol: :lol:

Nice writing Paul

Cheers

Trev.. :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285274 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285261 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 08:16:42 +0000
It would be interesting to see how this one develops, especially if both John and Paul came up with music for it independently (e.g. would both tunes bear a lot of similarities or would they arguably be two distinct compositions).

props on this, and for doing it so quick! maybe it has to do with me being fairly green around here still, but I'm really struggling with this week's assignment.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Scrybe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285261 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285250 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 06:20:48 +0000
Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285250 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285248 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 06:05:57 +0000
None of this is to say, of course, that the original might not be the best choice. Repetition, especially in song lyrics (as you're well aware), can be key. It's just something that struck me during the first five reads.

Just out of curiosity, what is it about this piece that makes you think it's not in your "usual style?" Over the years of reading your lyrics and hearing your music, I'm not sure just what one would consider your style. And I'm not saying this to put you on the spot! I think that all of us have an image of our songwriting and how it's received. It's just that sometimes I think we'd all be surprised as to what we think is our "style" and what others think is our lyrical footprint, as it were.

Maybe I should make that whole question of style and perception a "sticky of the week?" :wink:

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg6-week-20-she/#post-285248