https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 08:39:02 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-330026 Sun, 31 May 2009 00:54:07 +0000 Yes the singer is trying to set up a meeting with the singee and is just ringing out of courtesy to make sure that its OK. V2 is the key, something has happened between them, a misinterpretation that has led to the strained relationship. The singer wants to resolve this but the singee is either too proud or too embarrassed to do anything about it. The singer understands this but is still keen to repair the relationship. I felt that the nature of the strained relationship was probably immaterial (and maybe a little too close to home) to make it more explicit. Thanks for your comments.

Ken, but you should change some of the narrative into dialogue
..
The whole song could be a conversation that way yes your quite right, it has changed hasn't it, I didn't notice that, thanks. Ill have to put my thinking cap back on and go with something along the lines you suggest.

Cheers
Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-330026 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-329983 Sat, 30 May 2009 16:54:11 +0000 This is a good one . . . I like what's going on . . . but you should change some of the narrative into dialogue . . .
since the assignment was basically write a one way dialogue.
Of course, if you are invoking the "It's OK to Ignore Vic's Assignment" clause . . . I understand . . .
I've used that clause several times to escape . . .

Anyway, in your second verse:

I heard about her
I never knew
Communication breakdown
Things not said
Messages unread
These are the things that let us down

How about:

I heard about you
I never knew
I'm sorry I didn't stay in touch
I meant to call . . .
to answer your mail
(But) when I tried it hurt too much

The whole song could be a conversation that way.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-329983 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-329976 Sat, 30 May 2009 12:58:50 +0000
Looking good :D

It might just be me...it seems like I should be able to tell what's going on and I don't mind a bit of mystery, but it's like I need one more clue..... :?

my best guess is an ex wanting to see his/her old flame but the old flame has a new partner that might get upset if they knew the old couple was meeting again ....even if they said it was "just friends" catching up on old times.

vs 1 looks as though the singer is confirming a meeting they already have planned "I thought I'd call you
Before I came"
but
vs3 looks as though the singer is trying to setup a meeting...."I understand why.......I want to see you all the same"

or it is both -the singer is confirming a meeting they already have planned ....but....the singee changed their mind and doesn't want to meet anymore....

....it looks like vs 2 is the key where somehow a "her" comes into play, but there's not enough there to know who she is or what happened...I am open to clarification......

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-329976 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-36131 Sat, 30 May 2009 09:30:46 +0000
Paul


Hello Hello
© Copyright 2009 Paul Brady

Hello, hello
How you been
It's been such a long long time
I thought I'd call you
Before I came
To talk about those old times

Hello, hello
Can you here me
Hello, hello
Are you still…still on the line?

I heard about her
I never knew
Communication breakdown
Things not said
Messages unread
These are the things that let us down

Hello, hello
Can you here me
Hello, hello
Are you still…still on the line?

I understand why
You don't want to see me
I understand your pain
But still I value
That friendship from way back
I want to see you all the same

Hello, hello
Can you here me
Hello, hello
Are you still…still on the line?

Hello, hello
Can you here me
Hello, hello
Are you still…still on the line?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg7-week30-hello-hello/#post-36131