https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 02:23:05 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78362 Sun, 05 Dec 2004 08:56:23 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Taintedpoet https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78362 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78330 Sun, 05 Dec 2004 02:04:18 +0000 Something maybe like

Everybody's standing in line looking for away in
You're looking for a way out
Am I wasting my time trying to hold you a spot
When the show is soldout with the cold breaking me down
Hoping and praying that time will flash by to the sound check

Well, that's my two cents work. :D :D :D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MikeM https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78330 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78326 Sun, 05 Dec 2004 00:48:45 +0000
I had a little trouble fitting a rhythm to it at first...verses are 7 lines, 6 lines and 4 lines...guessing the little 2-liner is a bridge....

But hey, work on anything long enough, you can make it fit....

:) :) :)

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78326 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78305 Sat, 04 Dec 2004 21:01:18 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-78305 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-77816 Wed, 01 Dec 2004 02:44:32 +0000
now im bleeding and breaking and starting to riot
the music's comsuming my souls become violent

That sounds a little better to me. Obviously this is where I would play a turnaround in the song but I fealt like it would be a strong point.

Also the line about the sound check was like that because I am supose to be close to the doors and the check is very loud I just was unsure how to get that feeling of urgency into the song.

Thanks for your imput.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Taintedpoet https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-77816 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-77750 Tue, 30 Nov 2004 19:58:36 +0000 - clearly, Parental Advisory WAS needed!!!

Anyway, mostly, I like it, just a couple of lines that didn't work for me:

'the sound check one, two, one'
- I couldn't help but think, "hang on, we're outside whilst the sound check goes on inside - how can we hear it?" I'm sure that wasn't what you were trying to get at, but that what I got from the line. Change it/don't change it, up to you.

'The music is flowing and the rock is not quiet'
- the rhyme seemed forced - which is a shame coz I like the line before. This one I'd definitely advise changing.

There we go - hope that helps.

I like the anger/nostalgia thing, although whether I would have got the nostaligia without you mentioning that I'm not sure.

But good!

G]]> Sunday Songwriters Group gjbrake https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-77750 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-5234 Tue, 30 Nov 2004 09:39:54 +0000
Now im standing in line saving your place
waiting for the show to start
Its sold out line is long I cant feel my face
Looking around at my comrads in arms
The cold slowly breaking us down
Hoping and praying that time will speed up
the sound check one, two, one

What am I saying
Your not gonna come
your not going to show up
your not gonna have fun

The doors upen up and a blast from the heat
the mob is ready to get off the cold street
Rusing inside caught in the haze
I buy you a shirt not thinking whats up
How dumb was that twenty bucks down the drain
something you wont get or appreciate

What am I saying
Your not gonna come
your not going to show up
Your not gonna have fun

Your loosing its time to cut us free
Now its on im throwing a fit
im loosing my mind cause im thinking of you
you make me go crazy I dont know what to do

What am I saying
Your not gonna come
your not going to show up
Your never any fun

Now im bleeding and breaking and starting to riot
The music is flowing and the rock is not quiet

What am I saying
your not gonna come
your not going to show up
Now im having fun

Now im having fun
Now im having fun]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Taintedpoet https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/sssg-iii-week-4-the-line-nostalgic/#post-5234