https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 19:20:38 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169884 Sun, 02 Apr 2006 23:39:30 +0000 revolving around the sun like we've always been for our yearly clock, but figured i'd have to save the sun for his own verse. i put father into it cause it fit better than man (plus i like the father finger alliteration), like joe mentioned i was trying to illustrate how we see and hear things at the same time but light travels 100 000 times the speed of sound, just our brain smoothing out reality for us, or life would be a poorly dubbed movie, i got this idea from the current discovery mag, anyways, thanks again.

m]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sytys https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169884 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169844 Sun, 02 Apr 2006 17:55:30 +0000
Interesting take on the assignment - good use of space time without once mentioning a continuum.

Interesting song though and certainly a good start. I think the matter scatter line is a bit too much in the chorus but the rhyming throughout certainly works especially if as you say you would like to rap it.

God start

Bob]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169844 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169805 Sun, 02 Apr 2006 07:02:17 +0000
Joe]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169805 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169788 Sun, 02 Apr 2006 04:03:29 +0000
There are a couple of bits in the verses that seem awkward... "a moon in the face" is quite a... well, surprising lyric; and that bit about the father - whoah! where the hell did that come from?!? I think you need to put him back in his own song and stick to the scientific philosophising here without introducing any characters.

I like the direction so far but try to stay on track with the wacky ideas and not get different genres mixed up in one song.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-169788 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/w21-space-time/#post-16762 Sun, 02 Apr 2006 00:33:01 +0000
space time

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it's about time that the time is here
sittin on the deck with a pipe and a beer
pocket all full of stellar matter
big bang was boom causing space to splatter

bending light and time cause we're takin up space
knowing once a month you get a moon in the face
pointing at polaris with our axis of spin
rotating once a day like we've always been

time gets bent by matter
time goes back forever
space time is getting fatter
making the matter scatter

watching your finger as you pluck that note
seeing your father as he clears his throat
you hear it done at the same time
but light travels to you on a faster line

time gets bent by matter
time goes back forever
space time is getting fatter
making the matter scatter

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trying to work out a couple more verses

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