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You could even take it a step further and play the blessing/curse angle a little more with a slight rephrasing:

Blessed
With these powers protecting the city
Cursed
With great power comes great responsibility

The second half of the chorus
Fighting evil
Saving the day
Saving lives
While mine slips away Is truly sublime!

Whenever you put this to music, you've got to let us know!

Looking forward to more.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-156097 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-155738 Tue, 31 Jan 2006 22:38:01 +0000

Swinging above the streets
Trying to make sense of pain
Protecting the earth and it's victims
But all my efforts are in vain

Chaos replacing order
In a world full of sin
Criminals on a spree
Together by the Kingpin


Cursed with these powers
And protecting the city
Living by with great power
Comes great responsibility

Fighting evil
Saving the day
Saving lives
While mine slips away


Returning home at sunrise
Winding down from my endeavor
Can't tell my Aunt the tale
Doomed to be alone forever

Back out on the streets
Slinging to protect the city
Looking down on normal people
Boring lives fill me with self pity


Cursed with these powers
And protecting the city
Living by with great power
Comes great responsibility

Fighting evil
Saving the day
Saving lives
While mine slips away]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-155738 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-155710 Tue, 31 Jan 2006 21:01:06 +0000
The good things I see here are the structure, the short and simple lines of no more than 4-5 words each, which probably means the song will have a good rhythm and be easy to sing.

As for words, one thing I might say is that you might as well just make it clear that it's Spiderman. It seems like you are deliberately omitting his name to prevent giving the game away, but then you drop these clues like 'can't tell my Aunt' and 'slinging to protect the city'. These lines seem odd and out of place given thhat they are the only specifics. You need to choose whether the song is about Spiderman, in which case use his name or make clearer references to him, or whether it's about a generic superhero, in which case change those lines.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-155710 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-155649 Tue, 31 Jan 2006 11:47:35 +0000
WOW What a good take on the topic ..Never thought about it the way you did , well done .

Verse 2 and the chorus I just loved them ...

Ilike this One wing alot

well done

:lol:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-155649 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-15072 Tue, 31 Jan 2006 06:51:26 +0000

Cruising above the streets
Trying to make sense of pain
Protecting the earth and it's victims
But all my efforts are in vain

Chaos replacing order
A world in an upheaval
Criminals on a spree
Together by the ultimate evil


Cursed with these powers
And protecting the city
Living by with great power
Comes great responsibility

Fighting evil
Saving the day
Saving lives
While mine slips away


Returning home at sunrise
Winding down from my endeavor
Can't tell my Aunt the tale
Doomed to be alone forever

Back out on the streets
Slinging to protect the city
Looking down on normal people
Boring lives fill me with self pity


Cursed with these powers
And protecting the city
Living by with great power
Comes great responsibility

Fighting evil
Saving the day
Saving lives
While mine slips away]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-13-owa/#post-15072