https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 07:43:33 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-158267 Fri, 10 Feb 2006 18:07:34 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Karla https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-158267 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157800 Thu, 09 Feb 2006 04:09:13 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Saber https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157800 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157799 Thu, 09 Feb 2006 04:05:44 +0000
Take away the sound.
Take away my vision.
I can't get my head around
This vile apparition.

Any ideas on the music?

Peace Oye vey. Ya'll really like the first one better? It was so strained when I wrote it. And one winged angle hit the target with the inconsistancy. I suppose I could try to change that without such large alterations as the second one had. One of the big things that bothered me about the first one was the last verse. It seemed sort of like a copout for me for various reasons. One, I over use the concept of found or find, and two, I just bought the bowie cd LOW the other day and I noticed that I probably got the idea of sound and vision from the bowie song Sound and Vision. I realize I'm by far not the first artist to rip off david bowie lyrics, but I'd like to try and avoid it if I can.

Although ya'll are right. I have the bad habit of trying to spell things out too thickly like I did with the second one. It was a clear cut story, no in's, no out's, and you don't see that flying by too much in the music world. Eccept maybe with a folk song or something.

I do like your suggestion for the EVIL verse mr. hodge. But I'd probably go with this to keep with the theme and because I'm stingy about taking other peoples ideas :P

Take away the sound.
Take away my vision.
Haven't the stomock to down (Or possible lost the stomock to down, if it conflicts with previous verse or timing)
this vile apparition.

And no, I haven't even considered this musically yet. I'm still trying to record my doorman post, and am quickly loosing an uphill battle. For some reason I can't keep on tempo. I just starting using an online metranome for that song, and it sounds like I'm on it when I play, but when I go back to it I find something much different. It's very aggravating, but I'll keep at it and try to work on this before the weeks over.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Saber https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157799 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157624 Wed, 08 Feb 2006 16:18:35 +0000
Take away the sound.
Take away my vision.
I can't get my head around
This vile apparition.

Any ideas on the music?

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157624 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157072 Mon, 06 Feb 2006 22:03:13 +0000 This is an interesting song. I have to say that I like your original better. For me the original is more pure (if that's the word) I like it's simplistic elegance. That's not to say that I think the song is simplistic, far from it.
These two stanza's are great. Fo me they are the heart of the song, well done.

And I haven't the nerves,
to become a creature.
Be stolen from habit
and taken by nature.
Anxious and timid
Eternally losing.
All for the sake
of being a human. Take away the sound.
Take away my vision.
I don't like what I've found
in this apparition. In fact the last one Id be inclined to use as the last stanza in the song.

Cheers

pbee]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157072 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157003 Mon, 06 Feb 2006 16:38:22 +0000
For some folks, it's a way to kind of mark their territory, if you will. I send a copyright packet in once or twice each year (you can copyright things en masse, in essence paying one copyright fee for a bunch of songs instead of doing each one individually) and marking a song this way let's me know it's "in the process" of getting its copyright. Technizally speaking, though, they won't be copyrighted until I get confirmation from the Powers That Be.

I'm still working on "digesting" your song for this week :wink: and I'll try to post up some comments later.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-157003 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156915 Mon, 06 Feb 2006 05:59:00 +0000 So here I am, and I've ironed out some of the kinks ya'll were taking about.
FULL OVERHAUL BABY.
And again c&c much apprechiated.

Take bulldogs, take bears
Take tame and take vicious.
Take mothers, take fathers
They'll all be delicious.

Take jocks and take freaks
enamored by hatred
Take mice and take men
they'll all be sedated.

Bind me down and take my mind
Choking, drowning all the time.
Hang on to what you can find.
In this stew of, all kind.

While feasting on dreams where
One never gets old
My stew grew a face and
Swallowed me whole.
The surface grows dim,
As I sink to the bottom.
The taste of my stew
Already forgotten.

Bind me down and take my mind
Choking, drowning all the time.
Hang on to what you can find.
In this stew of, all kind.

And I haven't the nerves,
to become a creature.
Be stolen from habit
and taken by nature.
Anxious and timid
Eternally losing.
All for the sake
of being a human.

Bind me down and take my mind
Choking, drowning all the time.
One last taste and I'd be fine
From this stew of,
All kind.

©2006 J. Aldridge]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Saber https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156915 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156909 Mon, 06 Feb 2006 05:44:09 +0000
Keep working on this.

I not sure what it is but there is something there.

I think once you get it focused you will have a good song.

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156909 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156906 Mon, 06 Feb 2006 05:20:33 +0000
I'm not sure which direction I'd want to turn it towards now that it's done. The original topic was pretty limited but songs focusing on myself annoy me. I'll see what I can do with it later.

Thanks for commenting:)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Saber https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156906 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156902 Mon, 06 Feb 2006 04:37:48 +0000
Take bulldogs, take bears
Take tame and take vicious.
Take mothers, take fathers
They'll all be delicious.

Take jocks and take freaks
enamored by hatred
Take mice and take men
they'll all be sedated.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-14-stew-of-all-kind/#post-156902