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I've really sort of put this one to bed lyrically. Thanks for the suggestion though. One day there may be an mp3 of this. Not sure yet.

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/paged/2/#post-56704 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/paged/2/#post-56703 Fri, 13 Feb 2004 01:25:35 +0000

My "suggestion" would be

Go ask the glass man
but don't talk to loud
Don't shatter his peace ( or life or something )
He's just a glass man

go well
Ja'mir]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/paged/2/#post-56703 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56702 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 11:54:17 +0000
And im hoping to make an mp3 of this one. Thanks for your suggestion. Even if I don't use it its still nice to know there are people that care enough about my lyrics to want to make them better. Its a compliment to me when anyone takes the time to post anything at all under one of my songs.

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56702 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56701 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 06:36:04 +0000
scratchmonkey]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56701 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56700 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 04:33:32 +0000
-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56700 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56699 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 03:15:40 +0000
What if you sort of dice that line up and spread it out over two lines?  Sort of like:

Go ask the glass man,
With his soul trapped inside him,
like lightning in sand,
He's just a glass man.

Just a thought.

scratchmonkey]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56699 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56698 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 00:00:42 +0000
My apologies if this was a particularly difficult assignment but I think you've produced something worthwhile out of it so it can't be all bad.

Bob  ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56698 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56697 Tue, 10 Feb 2004 23:09:54 +0000
Go ask the glass man
Feeding his pigeons
Perfectly patient
He's just a glass man

Its not as dramatic. But simple is good I think.

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56697 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56696 Tue, 10 Feb 2004 21:54:32 +0000
-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56696 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56695 Tue, 10 Feb 2004 19:18:53 +0000
Yes I went and looked up the photo.  I had to redeem myself for using a word correctly, but not recognizing it as a word.  (doh!)

This song looks wonderful, as I expected it would.  The only thing about it that needs attention, (I think, and I hesitate to mention it) is your pet line, "Lightning trapped in sand".  I like that line perhaps almost as much as you do, but I don't think it fits there.  It almost looks gratuitous.  I think you could build the chorus around that line.  As it is, it looks like it was tossed in at the end.

In all, I think it's very good.  And I think  you can use as many or as few lines as you like.  You typically use them very well, so the (odd / even)ness doesn't really matter.

really good work, marv.

scratchmonkey]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-15-glass-man/#post-56695