https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 12:54:15 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-165056 Mon, 13 Mar 2006 04:17:48 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-165056 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-165053 Mon, 13 Mar 2006 04:10:43 +0000
Thanks for lightening things up.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-165053 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-165006 Mon, 13 Mar 2006 00:27:34 +0000
well Bob did say stay away from the trodden path and you

definetly did that

lots of imagery , I could actually visualise this , :lol: :lol:

Apparently, teletubbies were on sale


As I think "they were bought by his mom"

they are the 2 lines that really bring this to life for me

well done

Hilch :?:

ps...
question how on earth did you come up with this ?
it's a wonderful use of your imagination]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-165006 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164990 Sun, 12 Mar 2006 23:13:48 +0000
Geoo]]> Sunday Songwriters Group geoo https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164990 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164986 Sun, 12 Mar 2006 23:05:43 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Gina https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164986 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164972 Sun, 12 Mar 2006 21:37:28 +0000
The bits I found problematic were:
-"room" rhyming with "bathroom"
-the word "exits" (it could work though)
-"but it is broken" - it's not obvious this refers to the trance
-teletubbies reference (although it's pretty funny now I've read it again)

On the plus side, this song features the best use of the word "underpants" I have ever seen, and with the right delivery it could be a fun and catchy tune. The length looks fine on paper but after reading through I am left wishing for one more verse...]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164972 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164971 Sun, 12 Mar 2006 21:34:27 +0000
Too darn funny OWA.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Ghost https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-164971 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-16176 Sun, 12 Mar 2006 21:24:04 +0000
I look at him from across the room
As he exits from the bathroom
I check him out, looking at his torso
Then I tilt my head to look low
While thinking he's the one
Till I see his fly's undone

I am left in a trance
By his underpants
But it is broken as I begin to wail
Apparently, teletubbies were on sale
He looks over and gives an odd stare
As I laugh and fall off my chair

I told him I didn't want to sound mean
But it was the funniest thing I've ever seen
A grown man drinking and acting like a clown
Flirting with the girls, With his zipper down
I apologize to him to keep him calm
As I think "they were bought by his mom"

I am left in a trance
By his underpants
But it is broken as I begin to wail
Apparently, teletubbies were on sale
He looks over and gives an odd stare
As I laugh and fall off my chair

He finally goes out the door
At which point I fall to the floor
My laughing continued and wouldn't wouldn't let up
Because after all his yelling, he forgot to do it up]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-19-owa/#post-16176