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And "...opened UP my eyes" sounds great.  I must agree that I like it when bands have some "catch phrases" that show up all the time.  Didn't the Police and Sting toss in that "every breath you take" concept into several songs?

(by the way, you can change/ignore/alter any suggestions I give.  I have no ego here--I'm just experimenting and trying to practice.  You could say, "then I opened up my hanky and blew my nose" if that fit better!   ;D  )]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-57247 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-57246 Wed, 14 Apr 2004 11:16:14 +0000
you're lonely, bitter, unhappy and then you find love and happiness cuz finally found something that actually means something to you.
"true love heals all wounds."

and then it all ends and it hurts. but it only hurts cuz it was true love and because it actually meant something to you.
"true love wounds all healed by love"

as for changing it to "then i opened my eyes." to fit it would have to be "then i opened up my eyes." which probably makes no difference to you.. but i actually already have "then i opened up my eyes" in another song. though i do like repeated themes through a band's material. like radiohead's "this isn't happening" (track 4)  "this is really happening" (track 8)

i'll try and get this song posted. i have a recording of it with me and a drum machine only... but i'll try and get a band version cuz it's much better that way.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group homeboy_hug https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-57246 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-57245 Tue, 13 Apr 2004 00:51:55 +0000
I really like the way you contrast "true love heals all wounds" with " true love wounds all healed..."

For that second verse set, if you don't mind a suggestion, what about if you changed the verse that goes:

i dreamt my arm was
holding you close
then i woke up

to:
i dreamt my arm was
holding you close
then i opened my eyes

(which will rhyme with "until you came by" kind of...)
however the meter isn't so good. ...still might work...

I like this one.  Moody, a little bitter.  Sounds like some good angst going on.  I can imagine it with some pop synth happily going on in the background filled in with some minor-key crunchy guitar working with the lyrics.  Might make some fun contrasts that would fit this "true love hurts" pop song.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-57245 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-57244 Mon, 12 Apr 2004 09:07:57 +0000
Some suggestions:  The second set of stanzas are a little bumpy.  They don't really have a rhyme scheme or a set meter.   All songs don't have to follow a strict structure, but your first verses do rhyme.  I also don't understand what you mean by, "then true love wounds all healed by love" - This could be my own stupidity.  You talk about not being found and dreaming of your love.  Maybe you could add another verse to connect your lyrics to the chorus a little more.

Hope I was helpful,
purple]]> Sunday Songwriters Group purple https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-57244 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-1855 Sun, 11 Apr 2004 10:38:47 +0000
"true love"

i died my hair gold
so i won't be known
by anyone in this town

i turned my phone off
so i won't be called
and i won't be found

cuz true love is the cure
true love heals all wounds
then true love wounds all healed by love

i dreamt my arm was
holding you close
then i woke up

it was hard to tell
what was dreamt and was real
until you came by (for the last time)

but true love is the cure
true love heals all wounds
then true love wounds all healed by love]]> Sunday Songwriters Group homeboy_hug https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-23-true-love/#post-1855