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Nice and easy to play and get a feel for what you were trying for here. Nice chord sequence for the chorus.

Really makes you feel for Stazlie- you're instantly on her side.

Good stuff

Bob :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176886 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176853 Sun, 14 May 2006 09:46:46 +0000
Well very descipitive , and I think the chords would suit this remarkably well


Keep posting

L.K]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176853 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176530 Fri, 12 May 2006 08:28:12 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Dustdevil https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176530 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176496 Fri, 12 May 2006 05:22:40 +0000
The song also leaves me wanting to know what happens next? It does well to establish a connection with the character. And like David said, it does well with not too much detail, allowing the listener to "fill in the blanks".
Stazlie knows there's people counting on her.
Her briefcase stares back at her from the floor.
Stazlie finally knows what she must do now.
'Grabs her coat while heading out the door. I really like this last verse. And maybe I'm completely off the mark in my interpretation here, but what I think of when I read this is: "So what is she going to do?". Of course, I then read the last line and think that the "coat" is a reference to the cold of Montana, so she's leaving behind the briefcase but taking the coat and fulfilling her dreams.

Okay, either this is way off the mark or blatantly obvious. Either way, don't hesitate to tell me so. :oops: :D

Great work. 8) Thanks for all the comments, guys. You don't know how helpful this is to me. A couple of things to say...

1. I cheated somewhat. I started this a couple of weeks ago. There is no way I could write a song completely in a week. Writing to me, at this point is like solving a Rubik's Cube. Twisting and turning words and phrases in and out until my head hurts. I have great respect for those of you for whom the words flow out easily and in meter. I just thought this song fit the theme well, so points off for that.
2. I wanted to write the world's only song in F#m. What I got was either F#m, A, or G. I'm not sure. I'll try to re-edit with chords on the original post. You can play it in F#m, or in Em (capo 2) or even higher in Am, or of course however you want.... :)
3. Bennett, you nailed it! I purposely left the ending ambiguous because I was curious to see how different people would interpret it. So it's a story, it's a riddle. The "coat" could be for Montana or it could be a raincoat for the "darkened, rainy skies". Either interpretation works. I can see 3 possible endings to the song...
a. Stazlie "comes to her senses" and goes to work.
b. Stazlie "comes to her senses" and leaves to persue her dreams.
c. Stazlie goes to work and the whole process starts over the next day.

I think what you can feel for Stazlie is pity but also empathy. It's really a song about getting up in the morning, looking in the mirror and making a choice. Some days are easier than others. I guess the day you finally "cash out" is the day you retire. (BTW, I don't really know if women think this way. I didn't think anyone would feel sorry for "Stanley") I'd like to think Stazlie eventually ends up on a beach somewhere with a Pina Colada, but make up your own ending. I'm out of words...

When I played this for friends and family, I got a whole lot of "neutral". I think the lack of length has a lot to do with that. Ironically, my pointless meandering above is many times longer than the song itself. I'm still overthinking things. Any suggestions as to how to improve the length or melody would be greatly appreciated. I'll try to get the chords in tonight.

Thanks to all for taking the time to read it and comment.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Dustdevil https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176496 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176463 Fri, 12 May 2006 02:51:43 +0000
Yeah I also like this and do agree with others about the length ..

There is just so much in here that I can relate to .. such as married to a job she doen't love ..

And when I read this ,Stazlie checks the new lines on her forehead

I quickly ran my hand across my forehead :lol:

Like already mentioned I would like more I was just really feeling for her and it ended .

What you have is really good

Keep up the writting

Hilch :?:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176463 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176453 Fri, 12 May 2006 01:47:10 +0000
The song also leaves me wanting to know what happens next? It does well to establish a connection with the character. And like David said, it does well with not too much detail, allowing the listener to "fill in the blanks".
Stazlie knows there's people counting on her.
Her briefcase stares back at her from the floor.
Stazlie finally knows what she must do now.
'Grabs her coat while heading out the door. I really like this last verse. And maybe I'm completely off the mark in my interpretation here, but what I think of when I read this is: "So what is she going to do?". Of course, I then read the last line and think that the "coat" is a reference to the cold of Montana, so she's leaving behind the briefcase but taking the coat and fulfilling her dreams.

Okay, either this is way off the mark or blatantly obvious. Either way, don't hesitate to tell me so. :oops: :D

Great work. 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bennett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176453 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176389 Thu, 11 May 2006 20:29:06 +0000
Only comment would be that it's short and I'd love more. That doesn't mean it should be longer, though. Leaving them wanting more is important.

Can't wait to read your next one!

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176389 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176361 Thu, 11 May 2006 17:27:03 +0000
I liked this alot, can't put my finger on anything :)

When reading, I imagined it sounding like a Counting Crows song or similar. Do you have any music in mind to go with it? Any chance of recording?

Good stuff!

:)
-man]]> Sunday Songwriters Group manontheside https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-176361 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-17609 Thu, 11 May 2006 15:07:41 +0000 Stazlie open (capo 2) F#m(Em) D(C) Stazlie wakes up early every morning A(G) E(D) Tries to wipe the sleep out of her eyes F#m(Em) D(C) Stumbles out of bed toward the window A(G) E(D) And stares out at the darkened, rainy skies. ---- Chorus A(G) D(C) 1.2.(But) 3. Stazlie dreams of living in Montana G(F) D(C) A(G) Breathing in the cold mountain air A(G) D(C) Or maybe on a beach in Aruba G(F) D(C) A(G) With ocean breezes blowing through her hair --- F#m(Em) D(C) Stazlie checks the new lines on her forehead A(G) E(D) With the grey hairs sitting softly up above F#m(Em) D(C) How'd she ever find herself so lonely? A(G) E(D) Married to a job she doesn't love? (Chorus) F#m(Em) D(C) Stazlie knows there's people counting on her. A(G) E(D) Her briefcase stares back at her from the floor. F#m(Em) D(C) Stazlie finally knows what she must do now. A(G) E(D) Grabs her coat while heading out the door. (Chorus) ]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Dustdevil https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-stazlie/#post-17609