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Very emotional and honest.

Certainly a slow, reflective piece however you wish to play it. In fact try to record both when you can and put it to a vote - now that could be interesting.

Good stuff

Bob :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176879 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176857 Sun, 14 May 2006 10:00:21 +0000
Just remember it's your song and you play it the way you want


Keep Posting

L.K]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176857 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176468 Fri, 12 May 2006 02:57:37 +0000
Yep another vote for country over here .. :lol: :lol:

Might be I like a bit of country music .....

I'm not entirely convinced that rebuild mentioned twice in the same verse works , maybe once but not twice ( just my opinion)

hilch :?:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176468 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176408 Thu, 11 May 2006 22:17:22 +0000
One thing I'd tinker with is the middle of the first verse:
I enjoyed the real laughter
As we smiled upon our past
I enjoyed the real tears
We both cried cause this couldn't last The last line here seems a little wordy and redundant as well. Maybe

I enjoyed the real laughter
As we smiled upon our past
I enjoyed the real tears
I'm sure they won't be my last

or something like that?

Looking forward to reading more and to hopefully hearing this sometime.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176408 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176292 Thu, 11 May 2006 04:49:23 +0000
I liked this alot, the first verse made me think about the breaking up with my ex, and the feeling stayed there throughout the read (though only the first verse fit)
A lot of emotion and sort of straight from the heart, good writing :)

I can hear the country in this, any chance you'll get it recorded? I'd love to hear!

:)
-man]]> Sunday Songwriters Group manontheside https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176292 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176214 Wed, 10 May 2006 20:59:54 +0000
I really like what you've written. The emotion really comes through. I have one little itty bitty suggestion . . . . . for me the word "rebuild" is so mechanical it goes against the sensitivity of everythinig else you write. I wonder if there's a better way to phrase it in line with the "growing" aspect you mention.

Really nice work!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group chefie https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176214 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176199 Wed, 10 May 2006 19:00:35 +0000
As for style, slow metal... sure! I don't particularly like country music but for some reason every time I sing this I end up singing it with a country twang. Maybe I just wrote my first country song?

Hmmmm, I guess if i did then this songwriting group is certainly hitting it's mark in making us write out of our little boxes!

Rob]]> Sunday Songwriters Group morkalg https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176199 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176155 Wed, 10 May 2006 09:01:16 +0000
A really good song you wrote this week. :D

I can almost hear this as a some slow grinding metal melody.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Ghost https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176155 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176142 Wed, 10 May 2006 06:53:39 +0000
Sorry I missed this thread mate. I think you must've posted so early it got lost among all the Week 26's. :D

Anyway, to the song ...

I can see a lot of emotion in this. Sorta hard to miss. :)

About the only thing I could pick up on though was the theme of waking up. Though, I can see through your lyrics that this is sort of implied.

Anyway, good work. :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bennett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-176142 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-17520 Sun, 07 May 2006 17:13:19 +0000 What You Grow Into

It was a long night of talking
I'd only come to get more clothes
We both knew I was still walking
Though there lingered something in our souls
I enjoyed the real laughter
As we smiled upon our past
I enjoyed the real tears
We both cried cause this couldn't last
And as I drove away that night
So we could both begin new lives
The headlights cut the darkness
And I began to realize

-I don't want to lose you all the way
-I'd like to somehow remain
-A friend that you can tell a secret to
-Someone you know will laugh with you
-I never meant to make you cry
-Theres so much good I want for you
-I wanna watch you pick yourself back up
-I wanna see what you grow into

I made it back with the boxes
In a dark house I put it all away
Then I walked there among the windows
Wondering what would come with day
I know I have myself to rebuild
There so much work that I must do
But I don't want to lose the part of me
That wants to see that you rebuild too
So I think I'll call you from time to time
Just to hear about your life
You were so much good for me
And I just now realized

-I don't want to lose you all the way
-I'd like to somehow remain
-A friend that you can tell a secret to
-Someone you know will laugh with you
-I never meant to make you cry
-Theres so much good I want for you
-I wanna watch you pick yourself back up
-I wanna see what you grow into]]> Sunday Songwriters Group morkalg https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-27-what-you-grow-into/#post-17520