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P.S. I thought your first one was much better than the second. It
was much more compact. This one is a bit wordy for my taste.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MJBird https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61533 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61432 Sun, 30 May 2004 06:42:03 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group bstguitarist https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61432 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61426 Sun, 30 May 2004 03:28:12 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Snoogans775 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61426 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61404 Sat, 29 May 2004 17:36:30 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group bstguitarist https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61404 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61395 Sat, 29 May 2004 09:01:13 +0000 and you found something that rhymed with grace under pressure, I just put it in the middle of the phrase.

I like the song structure, like the two ending lines of the chorus were dilligently diggable]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Snoogans775 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-61395 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-2515 Sat, 29 May 2004 08:35:36 +0000
The Rise

(Intro)
The symptoms are coming to me,
Audiovisual madness, what does it really mean?
Continuous confusion counts down as time slips away,
I cant think straight,
The fog in my head won't blow away.

(Verse one)
Not hearing clear,
Obstructed sight,
All the noises inside my ears,
The daze of confusion for so many years,
I can't see the light,
Please don't cry, for darkness has no tears.

(Chorus)
Make the words matter because war is on,
Let's see what happens,
The battle was lost but the war was won,
No one here will ever give up,
We've tried so hard,
We've come too far.

(Verse two)
Grace under pressure,
I'm on the rise
Will I come up short of measure?
Will I realize?
Will I I surmount the highest hill?
Or will I live a lie?

(Verse three)
I can see that the melodies are new to me,
Got to learn the ropes,
Pull them tight,
There are kinks in the line,
These are things that just aren't right,
Everything will turn out fine.

(Outro)
I can see the light,
Look at me,
There's no stopping now,
A tightrope walk out of insanity,
I'm on the rise,
I'll be the best I can be.

The end

I would like to point out that I used a few alliterations in this:
Continuous confusion counts down as time slips away and
The battle was lost but the war was won Hope you enjoy the song!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group bstguitarist https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-the-rise-revised/#post-2515