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Good start :D

It looks like you are taking what is often associated with a negative (rain) into a positive.

Suggestions:
Consider more clues as to why the singer likes the rain....You already have eases fear and cleaning the soul....seems there could be more details developed....but it could depend on the music.

I just read through "Singing in the Rain" basically the singer is happy b/c of the person he's with despite the rainy weather.....maybe develop the idea of rain reminding the singer of a significant event or reoccurring mantra in life...etc

This part might need a bit of reworking:

Washing my dreams away....WHY IS WASHING ONE'S DREAMS AWAY GOOD? MAYBE WASH AWAY NIGHTMARES/CARES
Cleaning my soul today.....YES, THIS CAN FIT WITH CLEANSING, BUT WHAT CLEANSING NEEDS TO TAKE PLACE?
Makes me think of you......OK WORKS AS A SET UP LINE
And the things that we do ...LIKE WHAT? SHOW DON'T TELL

Just some points to consider....take or leave as you see fit :wink:

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-van-couver-rain/#post-353803 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-30-van-couver-rain/#post-39269 Mon, 31 May 2010 03:24:01 +0000 A slight deviation from the assignment ...




All those fears don't matter ....
That eases my ol grey matter

I love it when the clouds roll in
Doesn't matter where I've been
The sky darkens down
Lightenings firing around

Washing my dreams away
Cleaning my soul today
Makes me think of you
And the things that we do ...

And ..
Its'the sound of the pitter , patter
Did my fears ever matter
Nothings cooler
Then rain in Van Couver

The Americans just don't know
The English can have the snow
There's sun in Australia
But in Van it won't fail ya ....

With rivers flowing down
Ole Mother Nature she won't frown
Everything is clean again
With all the water laying around

And ..
Its'the sound of the pitter , patter
Did my fears ever matter
Is there anything cooler
When Its raining in Van Couver

I love rain in Van couver
Raining in Van couver ....


All comments welcomed ....
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