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Well the actual title of the the song I "ripped off "alludes me at moment
think of Shrek the movie ? ( childrens movie / big kids )

Come on Come on the worlds a little brighter
I know that line is in the song

sorry

L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-109524 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-109461 Sat, 02 Jul 2005 17:17:34 +0000
Nice whimsical song I wish I could write more fun stuff like this.
I won't mention "The Line" you heard enough already.

Just Wondering ? Are the song you're refering to "ripping off"
C'mon C'mon by the Von Bondies ?

As B B King said, " None of us steal but we all borrow "

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-109461 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108809 Tue, 28 Jun 2005 23:46:25 +0000
this is a nice light hearted number. I agree with Vic about that line (you know the one :P ) but I dont think it detracts from the song in any way.
I actually like playing with the english language Good for you, and keep it up. The older I get the more I am amazed at the english lanuage, and how there is almost a word to portray every nuance or feeling about any subject. I was hopless at english at school.

I think this forum is the place to experiment with things even pushing the envelope on grammer so keep up the good work :D.

pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108809 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108704 Tue, 28 Jun 2005 12:09:28 +0000
This line :

Thousands of people they will shout

What will they shout ?

They will of course shout

come on come on

was what I was trying to say in my own indifferent way

I actually like playing with the english language trying to find a universal way of getting my point across such as the lines that have already been mentioned . This how ever does not mean to say that I got it right and maybe I am totally off the mark with my interuptations of the masses with my explainations of the scenes I am trying to portray .

I am sorry if my response comes over a bit heavy , it is not meant to insult anyone , I am just trying to get better at this song writting stuff .

Appreciate responses my explainations are quite annoying to most I suppose. :wink:

Cheers

L.K :arrow:

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108704 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108678 Tue, 28 Jun 2005 07:26:32 +0000
Also,
Thousands of people they will shout Could be:
Thousands of people will cheer and shout

I think that sounds a little less forced.


Not much else to add... fun stuff, maybe just needs some minor tweaking like has already been mentioned.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108678 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108598 Mon, 27 Jun 2005 23:23:42 +0000
glad you enjoyed it



Cheers

L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108598 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108597 Mon, 27 Jun 2005 23:19:39 +0000
fun song:) also stumbled about the line Vic mentioned... maybe it could be something like
Trapeeze artists, it's gravity they dare
or
Trapeeze artists and gravity, they do dare pretty girls etc.

hm.... not that easy to reword, see it now.... well, just leave it as you have it then. after all it's a fun song so it needn't strictly and seriously follow grammar;)

enjoyed reading.
cheers,
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108597 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108596 Mon, 27 Jun 2005 23:11:35 +0000

Yes foot stomping / people just having fun sort of piece , organ playing in the breaks ? never thought of that pity I don't know someone who plays one .

The line you mentioned I thought fitted well with it's gramma but I might be a little bias ? :oops:

But thanks Vic as always comments and opinions are always welcome

take care

cheers

yours in music :wink:

L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108596 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108570 Mon, 27 Jun 2005 19:29:58 +0000
The only line I'm not sure about is "Trapeeze artists who gravity they do dare"....I can sort of fit it into a rhythm in my head, but the grammar grates a little....

Sounds to me (in my head, anyway!) that this should be a loud foot-stomper with fairground organ playing in the breaks....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-108570 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-9880 Mon, 27 Jun 2005 12:00:06 +0000 does it make sense ? No is it a bit of fun ? yes . Just playing around with chords and words at the time I wrote this and it seemed Ok to me . Hope it brings a smile . :D

Come On

Chorus

So come on come on
The circus is in town
So come on come on
Turn your frown upside down
Come on come on

Verse 1

Clowns , Lions everywhere
I think I even saw a bear
Trapeeze artists who gravity they do dare
Pretty girls with not much to wear

Chorus

So come on come on
The circus is in town
So come on come on
Turn your frown upside down
Come on come on

Verse 2

This has something for everyone
I 've never had soo much fun
I can't wait till the moon comes out
Thousands of people they will shout

Chorus

So come on come on
The circus is in town
So come on come on
Turn your frown upside down
Come on come on

Chorus

So come on come on
The circus is in town
So come on come on
Turn your frown upside down
Come on come on


Soooo everyone I know I ripped off another song a little but hey that's music :oops:


cheers

yours in music

L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-come-on/#post-9880