https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 14:33:32 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-113301 Sat, 23 Jul 2005 21:46:12 +0000
SfDean.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sfdean https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-113301 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-112975 Fri, 22 Jul 2005 16:32:57 +0000
Um, my criticism about that couplet wasn't about the rhythm or wording, it was about the sentiment. What I was driving at was that a deeper, more personal confession than "how much I cared" could be very powerful.

As far as the other changes... changing "running away to" to "both joining" may flow better, but you don't get the mid-line rhyme with "Cirque de Soliel". "Running away to" also has more of the circus connotation.

Changing the as's to if's works well, but if you do go with the more personal confession that I refered to, changing the if's back to as's just for the one time through the chorus after that would imply that he's been imagining it. "If we fell" is how they would talk to each other; "as we fell" is how the singer would describe a daydream to someone he really trusted (like us, the audience :D ).]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-112975 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-112952 Fri, 22 Jul 2005 12:46:40 +0000
Cirque de Soleil
(Catch Each Other If We Fell…)

We always joked together
We were going to run away,
Both quit this crazy job we shared
And join Cirque de Soleil.
Cirque de Soleil,
The circus of the sun.
Flying on the high trapeze
Would be a lot more fun
And, well
We might catch each other
If we fell.

I was married, hey you too,
But we'd laugh over lunch
And say that's what we'd do
Someday
Someday
That running joke we'd tell,
Run away to Cirque de Soleil
And maybe catch each other
If we fell.

It's a delicate balance,
A timing challenge--
Somehow we'd catch each other
If we fell

Your marriage broke
Mine got repaired
You moved to San Francisco
I hear you're happy there.

We used to joke together
We were going to run away
Both quit this crazy job we shared
And join Cirque de Soleil.
Cirque de Soleil,
The circus of the sun
Flying on the high trapeze
Would be a lot more fun
And, well
We might catch each other
If we fell.

Your marriage broke,
Mine got repaired.
I never told you
How much I cared.

I guess that's just as well…

In the old days,
With that running joke we'd tell
Of both joining Cirque de Soleil
Together
And how we'd catch each other
If we fell.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sfdean https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-112952 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-110431 Sun, 10 Jul 2005 19:54:53 +0000
I'll noodle around with it, and if I get a clearer version, I'll repost it.

Thanks for the feedback,

SfDean.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sfdean https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-110431 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-110395 Sun, 10 Jul 2005 05:44:30 +0000
If there's a weak part, I'd say it is the last time through the chorus:
Your marriage broke,
Mine got repaired.
I don't think I ever told you
Just how much I cared. Besides the Hallmarkishness, I think that the song implies that the two characters did more than just care for each other. Perhaps more explicity stating that the singer's desire (at least at some point) was that the in-joke become a reality. And if you could do it while retaining the "falling" imagery, that would be even better.

Maybe something like:

Your marriage broke,
Mine was saved
Despite the times I wasn't laughing
When we joked of falling again.

Don't know if that fits your rhythm or not, but that's more or less what I was thinking would fit the sentiment better. Hope you find it useful.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-110395 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-110393 Sun, 10 Jul 2005 04:34:45 +0000
SfDean.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sfdean https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-110393 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-10142 Sun, 10 Jul 2005 01:31:02 +0000
Cirque de Soleil
(Catch Each Other as We Fell…)

We always joked together
We were going to run away
Both quit this crazy job we shared
And join Cirque de Soleil.
Cirque de Soleil,
The circus of the sun.
Flying on the high trapeze
Would be a lot more fun.
And, well
We might catch each other
As we fell.

I was married, hey you too.
But we'd laugh over lunch
And say that's what we'd do.
Someday
Someday
That running joke we'd tell--
Run away to Cirque de Soleil,
And maybe catch each other
As we fell.

It's a delicate balance,
A timing challenge.
Somehow we'd catch each other
As we fell.

Your marriage broke.
Mine got repaired.
You moved to San Francisco.
I hear you're happy there.

We used to joke together
We were going to run away
Both quit this crazy job we shared
And join Cirque de Soleil.
Cirque de Soleil,
The circus of the sun.
Flying on the high trapeze
Would be a lot more fun
And, well
We might catch each other
As we fell.

Your marriage broke,
Mine got repaired.
I don't think I ever told you
Just how much I cared.

I guess that's just as well...

In the old days,
With that running joke we'd tell
Of runing away to Cirque de Soleil
Together
And how we'd catch each other
As we fell.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sfdean https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-34-late-cirque-de-soleil-catch-each-other/#post-10142