https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 09:49:17 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116833 Thu, 11 Aug 2005 05:26:34 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116833 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116649 Wed, 10 Aug 2005 12:52:57 +0000
hilch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116649 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116623 Wed, 10 Aug 2005 08:04:08 +0000
Just reading some other threads Q&A I might have to start calling you the piano man :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

hope the hand gets better soon mate :cry:

cheers

L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116623 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116575 Wed, 10 Aug 2005 03:16:10 +0000
Im glad you summoned the courage :D , as a first up this is great. You have the bones of good song here with a little tweaking. The Celts ideas are good. What would really boost this song for me would be a couple of lines that give us an insight as to why your so stubborn, and why we should care. And what your stubborness has to do with your relationship with your wife and kids. Great start, look forward to some more :D .

pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116575 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116559 Wed, 10 Aug 2005 01:33:58 +0000
The Celt wow man you got what I was trying to say wow impressive , and to think 3 of my favourite writters relpied and posted so quickly I 'm , mmm impressed .
Chris I was only fishing to see what sort of response I would get but hey now I know the rules I 'll try to post more songs.

Bluenight Angel thanks for your comments along with my old tipster L.k

hilch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116559 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116521 Tue, 09 Aug 2005 20:34:46 +0000
a fun song, eh? I like it, but would second lotto king's comment on taking advise from the celt, just a little expanding... would be great;)

to give you my two cents about "your stubborn"(if you still need them that is): to keep your as a possession thing you need to have a noun following (e.g. stubborness) but as you have an adjective "you're" would be better, anyway do as you like(when singing nobody will hear a difference anyway :wink: )

keep it up
cheers,
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116521 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116450 Tue, 09 Aug 2005 17:47:50 +0000
you're=you are

I'm not being a smart alec but isn't my stubboness is my possession ? there for I own it it's mine . Would not that make your rather than you are ?
please don't get me wrong I'm glad you pointed this out , but now I am thinking .
we are not talking a beautiful woman aka you are beautiful

rather my stubboness aka your stubborn ????
:D :D
You are stubborn aren't you mate! :D

Well, it could be "your stubbornness", but the word wasn't stubbornness, so it's still "you are stubborn" or "you're stubborn". Unquestionably true either way and, hey, it's your song so I say do it however it takes you fancy, eh. :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Chris C https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116450 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116439 Tue, 09 Aug 2005 17:28:01 +0000
Welcome old mate have seen you in Q&A lots of times , your first song rocks , the Celt nailed it on the head I love what he did with it please take advise from the very many gifted and talented people in here .

I would like to echo The Celts comments about what you said in
B A's thread

and I do believe Chris is right about your just for the record
Keep it up ( YOUR writting I mean )

Cheers
L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116439 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116437 Tue, 09 Aug 2005 17:15:38 +0000
For a first time songwriter this is pretty good.

I like the title but it would work better if you were to
change it to first person .

As in "I'm as stubborn as a mule"

The verse about the children bothers me a little
I'm sure you see them as more than something
that cramps your style and cuts into your drinking time.

I think you should expand on things on that verse
and prehaps the whole song so it gives us more emotion.

Example;

I love my daughters and my son
And this family life is fun
But I sure could use an old time drinking spree

I'm as stubborn as a mule
Sometimes I act like an old fool
It's time I learned to grow up
can't you see

I think you have a really good start and you
will get plenty of help here so you can mature as
a songwriter.

As far as " growing up" goes, I've got 9 years on you,
2 grown daughters, 3 grandsons, a lovely wife who
tolerates me but I still the words "grow up" far too often.

Celt

PS I read your comments in Bluenightangels thread.
Thank you for the compliments
I feel honored to be included with such a fine group of people.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116437 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116436 Tue, 09 Aug 2005 17:12:06 +0000
your = possession

you're=you are

I'm not being a smart alec but isn't my stubboness is my possession ? there for I own it it's mine . Would not that make your rather than you are ?
please don't get me wrong I'm glad you pointed this out , but now I am thinking .
we are not talking a beautiful woman aka you are beautiful

rather my stubboness aka your stubborn ????

mmmmmmmmmm oh forget me like I said married with children lifes like that

hilch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-me/#post-116436