https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 10:59:45 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-65146 Sun, 15 Aug 2004 06:41:23 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group E.Sherman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-65146 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-65141 Sun, 15 Aug 2004 05:34:47 +0000
great song. i think it is interesting that you chose to make it waltz like. it doesn't seem like most people write in the ballroom style. guess i am a little biased since i know how to waltz.

not much i can say to improve this song. it is really a sweet song and i can feel the intimacy and the tenderness in the words. i like how you reference the cliches in love poetry. i can't help it, i am a hopeless romantic so this really appeals to me. you took a simple little moment like wanting to dance with a girl and made it a heart-warming moment.

the only negative thing about this song for me and maybe it is just because i am only reading the lyrics and not hearing it. but it seems to just drop off for me with the line "But I just want to dance with you." it sems like there is this big cresendo and then it just kinda drops off wtih that line. but they maybe the point. that there is this whole big build up but you get back to the point at hand of this little close moment of a dance.

i would love to hear something sweet like this from a guy. i guess i can only dream for now. :(

can't wait to read more from you.

-CheapThrill]]> Sunday Songwriters Group CheapThrill https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-65141 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-65003 Thu, 12 Aug 2004 20:33:13 +0000
-- Scratch 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-65003 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-64925 Wed, 11 Aug 2004 13:01:22 +0000
nice to see something new from you;)
reading it I don't think it's one of your 'weaker' songs...I think it's awesome.

sweet idea/storyline...and I really like the chorus, that nothing is ever quite perfect( but at least they know the words :wink: )
and the verses, they're great, too
love these: Then where are all the fireworks the poets write about?
And why are all the stars still in the sky?
All I see is something different in your eyes. Those movie stars are wrong but that's alright
I'm quite content but if you still need a sign... (that is basically the whole song, isn't it? I mean it sums it up nicely)
While all the world crumbles around us
I've heard reckless love's not forever
But these mortal bodies arent either
They'll think us mad and call us both fools this is excellent:) only thing I stumble about is 'both'...does this work with the music? to me it would sound better without 'both' but it's your decision;))

great work as always:)
best wishes,
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-64925 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-64920 Wed, 11 Aug 2004 11:31:22 +0000
Just think of the whole thing as building itself larger and larger as it progresses.. the extra four lines are thre to build more drama into it. Id like to record this one to illustrate what Imena..but i don't have a proper orchestra.

-marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MarvelousOptimist https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-64920 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-64917 Wed, 11 Aug 2004 11:04:43 +0000
Good to see you back, man! I'm not sure what to make of this one. It's good, but I think it's not your best. Then again, you've submitted other songs that I've had that sentiment about, then when I hear them, they're terrific. So who knows? There are only two things here that give me pause.

1. The second chorus is longer than the first chorus, and I wonder how it might work if you moved "Strike up the Band" to right after "The world crumbles around us", then made those last 4 lines kind of a bridge, or an outro?

2. These lines:
If this is love then I'll let it be if you'll just let it be
A simple thing meant for only you and me

They seem to run together. And I love the "...I'll let it be if you'll just let it be a simple thing..." idea. It's really good. But it seems to me that it'd be awkward to sing. But like I said, in all probability, it'd be one of those things that when I heard it, it would be as natural as day and night.

I absolutely love the "Love-quietly-taking-hold-without-all-the-hollywood-fanfare" theme that you have going on here, as well as the narrators willingness to provide the fanfare should the object of his love desire it. Very nice approach to the assignment.

It's always a pleasure to see what you're going to come up with. I know you've had a pretty busy few weeks. Again, it's great to see you back around.

-- Scratch 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-64917 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-3075 Wed, 11 Aug 2004 03:56:30 +0000
"Strike Up The Band"

If this is love that's happening between us now
Then where are all the fireworks the poets write about?
And why are all the stars still in the sky?
All I see is something different in your eyes.

If this is love quietly whispering in my ear
That gives me shivers every time that you come near me
Those movie stars are wrong but that's alright
I'm quite content but if you still need a sign...

I'll strike up the band
Come with me darling please take my hand
Can you hear it now they're playing our song
They know the words but the music's all wrong
I know nothing is perfect
But even so it could be worth it
To build a new start from the ground up
While all the world crumbles around us
Strike up the band....

If this is love then I'll let it be if you'll just let it be
A simple thing meant for only you and me
These secret moments kept behind closed doors
But love if you're in need of something more

I'll strike up the band
Come with me darling please take my hand
Can you hear it now they're playing our song
They know the words but the music's all wrong
I know nothing is perfect
But even so it could be worth it
To build a new start from the ground up
While all the world crumbles around us
I've heard reckless love's not forever
But these mortal bodies arent either
They'll think us mad and call us both fools
But I just want to dance with you.
Strike up the band....


-marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MarvelousOptimist https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-40-strike-up-the-band/#post-3075