https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 14:35:14 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306889 Wed, 27 Aug 2008 18:49:53 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group chasing_time https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306889 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306507 Mon, 25 Aug 2008 03:51:49 +0000 So it was your time well spent, things meant, and your intent.
And then it suddenly turns back to her.
OK, kind of confusing but now I see it.

And as Celt said, the reformatting was more of a help for others who might want to offer suggestions.
No need for all of us to have to reformat it.
The spell check was something done while I was organizing it. (an extra bonus)

What do I think about it?
I think it's nice that you felt strongly enough about someone to write them a song.

KR2 Haha dodging a bullet there aye mate? so no comments on the lyrics then? O and It was saying that If I dead right now my life was well spend, There was some much we meant and I intended to spend my life you, your heaven sent.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Iwillbefamouswatchme https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306507 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306505 Mon, 25 Aug 2008 03:44:41 +0000 So it was your time well spent, things meant, and your intent.
And then it suddenly turns back to her.
OK, kind of confusing but now I see it.

And as Celt said, the reformatting was more of a help for others who might want to offer suggestions.
No need for all of us to have to reformat it.
The spell check was something done while I was organizing it. (an extra bonus)

What do I think about it?
I think it's nice that you felt strongly enough about someone to write them a song.

KR2]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306505 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306504 Mon, 25 Aug 2008 03:39:31 +0000

Nice Work! I notice that the corrections that Ken made are mostly
punctuation and grammar. Nothing is wrong with the body of the
song. I do think the first verse is slightly on the cliche side but
that can be forgiven when you come up with a phrase like
"smitten by your blade" Great stuff there.

Also take a look at the way Ken broke up the lines into a more
poetic format. Again nothing that takes away from your work
but makes it easier to read and get a sense of rhythm as you do.

Unless you intend it to be more a flow of consciousness piece
with the lines running together.

John Thanks, ya I ment to make it look poetic and spellcheck it but I was running out the door write before I posted it. Ya I really like the chorus and think my second verse turned out almost perfect how I agree the first verse is slightly cliche, any suggestions?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Iwillbefamouswatchme https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306504 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306501 Mon, 25 Aug 2008 03:33:55 +0000

Nice Work! I notice that the corrections that Ken made are mostly
punctuation and grammar. Nothing is wrong with the body of the
song. I do think the first verse is slightly on the cliche side but
that can be forgiven when you come up with a phrase like
"smitten by your blade" Great stuff there.

Also take a look at the way Ken broke up the lines into a more
poetic format. Again nothing that takes away from your work
but makes it easier to read and get a sense of rhythm as you do.

Unless you intend it to be more a flow of consciousness piece
with the lines running together.

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306501 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306499 Mon, 25 Aug 2008 03:26:57 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Iwillbefamouswatchme https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306499 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306485 Mon, 25 Aug 2008 00:57:26 +0000
Heaven Sent by Nico Filice

Shattered and broken but not afraid,
our fate was chosen by the decisions we made.
Cast in the shadows as we begin to walk astray
when the truth is painful you just lock yourself away.
now you're adrift in ocean fighting for control
as the longing inside you begins to take it's toll... as the longing inside you began to take its toll . . .

Now I'm Calling out to you,
My memories of everything we went through
and these scars will never fade,
love's a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade.
This battleground remains of open war, (singular)
These battlegrounds remain of open war, (plural)
pieces of a shattered heart begin to wash ashore
and I If I fall right now, time well spent, and if I fall right now, time well spent,
the things meant and my intent,
you're heaven sent.

Lost in the pages of my empty mind,
but the words become poison as the pages unwind.
The cover is missing and pictures are torn,
the binding is broken and writing is worn.
tales of loss and love, dreams and reality
as ambitions fade, fallen victim of mortality
and I need the warmth of your long embrace
to help restore my drive,
The passion of your sweet lips to make me feel alive......


Now I'm Calling out to you,
My memories of everything we went through
and these scars will never fade,
love's a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade.
These battlegrounds remains of open war, These battlegrounds remain of open war,
pieces of a shattered heart begin to wash ashore
and I If I fall right now, time well spent, and if I fall right now, time well spent,
the things meant we and my intent,
you're heaven sent.

instrumental

Now I'm Calling out to you,
My memories of everything we went through
and these scars will never fade,
loves a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade.

Smitten by, I'm smitten by, I'm by smitten,
I'm smitten by your Blade. YAH!

Now I'm Calling out to you,
My memories of everything we went through
and these scars will never fade,
love's a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade.
These battlegrounds remain of open war,
pieces of a shattered heart begin to wash ashore
and I If I fall right now,
time well spent,
the things meant and my intent,
you're heaven sent,
you're heaven sent,
you're HEAVEN SENT.

Just wondering if
time well spent, the things meant and your intent,
were heaven sent
would be something you might change.

KR2]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-306485 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-33164 Sun, 24 Aug 2008 22:16:55 +0000
Heaven Sent by Nico Filice

Shattered and broken but not afraid, our fate was chosen by the decisions we made. Cast in the shadows as we begin to walk astray when the truth is painful you just lock yourself away. now your adrift in ocean fighting for control as the longing inside you begins to take it's toll...

Now I'm Calling out to you, My memories of everything we went though and these scars will never fade, loves a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade. These battlegrounds remains of open war, pieces of a shattered heart begin to wash ashore and I If I fall right now, time well spent, the things meant and my intent, your heaven sent.


Lost in the pages of my empty mind, but the words become poison as the pages unwind. The cover is missing and pictures are torn, the binding is broken and writing is worn. tales of loss and love, dreams and reality as ambitions fade, fallen victim of mortality and I need the warmth of your long embrace to help restore my drive, The passion of your sweet lips to make me feel alive......


Now I'm Calling out to you, My memories of everything we went though and these scars will never fade, loves a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade. These battlegrounds remains of open war, pieces of a shattered heart begin to wash ashore and I If I fall right now, time well spent, the things meant we and my intent, your heaven sent.

instrumental

Now I'm Calling out to you, My memories of everything we went though and these scars will never fade, loves a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade.

Smitten by, I'm smitten by, I'm by smitten, I'm smitten by your Blade. YAH!

Now I'm Calling out to you, My memories of everything we went though and these scars will never fade, loves a fatal wound and I'm smitten by your blade. These battlegrounds remains of open war, pieces of a shattered heart begin to wash ashore and I If I fall right now, time well spent, the things meant and my intent, your heaven sent, your heaven sent, your HEAVENSENT.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Iwillbefamouswatchme https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-heaven-sent/#post-33164