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Welcome to SSG. Very nice I like the rewrite.

(not that the original was bad or anything)

I started on week 41 last year hope to see you still
here a year from now.

Good Job!

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-119688 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-118375 Wed, 17 Aug 2005 17:13:14 +0000 why haven't you tried before? Well, its because i've only just started playing guitar (about 2 mnths) and wanted to get some basic skills down before writing my own stuff!
And I wasn't sure about the title myself! I just put something in for the sake of it, I'm thinking that the line "I saw the light in disguise" would be a better title.

Thanks for the replys, I've had a tweak and added a bit

still not definitive but here goes:

My life was once grey
When I dreamed away days
Waiting to see something new

But I saw the rainbow (and)
I swear that your face glowed
The first time my eyes fixed on you

When I saw the white of your eyes
I saw the light in disguise
And all of the colours had changed in my life

Your brown flowing hair
Was like nature was there
In the city rush hour time

Smoothe lips of pink
Made me start to think
Wishing that they would meet mine

Then I saw the white of your eyes
I saw the light in disguise
All of the colours had changed in my life

That yellow dress
Had my mind in a mess
I gathered my thoughts for this chance

I said hello (and)
The rainbow showed
And the colours started to dance

When I saw the white of your eyes
I saw the light in disguise
And all of the colours had changed in my life

(bridge)
Now that I've met you,
and I've seen the colours
I know
I ain't gonna let you
Ain't gonna let you
Go

Cos I've seen the white of your eyes
I've seen the light in disguise
And all of the colours have changed my life


let me know what you think

p.s. this songwriting club is a cool idea, to keep your mind working on different things each week!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jimbob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-118375 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-118361 Wed, 17 Aug 2005 15:55:55 +0000
"The rainbow it glowed".....there's no need for the word "it" in there, it makes the line seem a little clumsy and forced....like Nick always says, if you wouldn't say it like that in conversation, don't write it down as a lyric....

But minor quibbles aside, a very creditable first effort....although I'm not too keen on the title...and I look forward to seeing more from you!!!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-118361 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-118180 Wed, 17 Aug 2005 00:10:20 +0000
not a bad first attempt at a song. I can see what you're trying to say with the song. Boy meets girl incident, bag of nerves until he sees in her eyes that it's all OK.

Good overall structure and not bad rhyming scheme. Don't overwork it but do revisit it and see if you can give more impact to some of the lines.

Good start and welcome to writing - kep it up.

Bob :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-118180 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-10992 Tue, 16 Aug 2005 17:27:17 +0000
I'm not sure that this is quite what you asked for but I started writing and this is what happened.


My life was grey
When I dreamed away days
Waiting to see something new

But I saw the rainbow
and swear that your face glowed
the first time my eyes fixed on you

When I saw the white of your eyes
I saw the light in disguise
And all of the colours had changed in my life

Your brown flowing hair
Was like nature was there
In the city rush hour time

Smoothe lips of pink
I started to think
Wishing that they would meet mine

When I saw the white of your eyes
I saw the light in disguise
And all of the colours had changed in my life

That yellow dress
Had my mind in a mess
I gathered my thoughts for this chance

I said hello
The rainbow it glowed
The colours they started to dance

When I saw the white of your eyes
I saw the light in disguise
And all of the colours had changed in my life

Please keep in mind I've been playing guitar for a little under 2 months and this is my first ever attempt at writing lyrics, so if the layout or ryming pattern (or any other method etc.) is wrong I didn't know!
It's a rough version, I did it in my lunch break at work and will check it over at home tonight.
Let me know what you think.

thanks
J]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jimbob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-lifes-colours/#post-10992