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Nice Stuff! I like the sentiment and the chorus is excellent.

The verses are good but seem like they could use a little
editing to me.

Took a trip back east to my old home town I like it. Point taken.
Maybe something like:
Took a drive down Jennings to my childhood "home" I think the word "home" is more emotional a house is just a
buliding where as a home is a place of comfort. I agree. I'm thinking something like: "Drove down Jennings St. by my childhood home"
I like the home idea, but I want to maintain an "emotional detachment", kind of like an outsider looking in. (Which I think fits the message of the song. He is an "outsider" now in one sense of the word.)

Hey guys, thanks for the kind words and keep those ideas coming. I don't offend easily. Maybe after you all fix my lyrics, you can help me with the intro....... :lol: :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Dustdevil https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-time-marches-on/#post-194547 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-time-marches-on/#post-194420 Sun, 20 Aug 2006 18:22:30 +0000
Nice Stuff! I like the sentiment ang the chorus is excellent.

The verses are good but seem like they could use a little
editing to me.

Example:
Took a trip back east to see my home town Is the word "see" nessacary. I think it would flow better as
Took a trip back east to my home town Or maybe:
Took a trip back east to my old home town Likewise on verse 2:
I drove down Jennings St. to see my childhood house Maybe something like:
Took a drive down Jennings to my childhood "home" I think the word "home" is more emotional a house is just a
buliding where as a home is a place of comfort.

All and all Good Work that could benifit from a bit of tweaking.

Of course that's just my opinion.

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-time-marches-on/#post-194420 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-time-marches-on/#post-194395 Sun, 20 Aug 2006 17:25:53 +0000
I like this it's really simple and very well done.

Good stuff

Bob :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-time-marches-on/#post-194395 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-time-marches-on/#post-19822 Sun, 20 Aug 2006 02:10:50 +0000
Took a trip back east to see my home town
It hardly seemed the same place at all
The grocery store in town
Years ago burned down
And everything moved to the highway by the mall.

*******
Chorus

It doesn't really matter what or who you know
It doesn't matter how many things you own
For in the end you know, all you have is time
And time.........marches on.
*******


I drove down Jennings St. to see my childhood house
The place looked tired, empty and alone
The trees, they looked so tall
The house, it looked so small
And the field where we played with the neighbor kids is gone.

(Chorus)

Nothing ever stays the same forever
You can't go home again, that's what they say
So treat your neighbors right
So you can sleep at night
And wake up grateful to the Lord for another day.

(Chorus)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Dustdevil https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-41-time-marches-on/#post-19822