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Nice simple heartfelt lyrics, but I think a song that has to be heard rather than read to get the full impact... let me know when you have a demo ready so I can have a listen. I have always liked the melodies you manage to put together !!!! Wish I could work that wat round.

go well
Ja'mir]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-120204 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-120176 Thu, 25 Aug 2005 15:43:59 +0000
interesting point, Slowplay, about the middle lines.....but what actually happened was, I only had a couple of verses to start with, started working on a bluesy solo, had to tighten the rhythm a little, then had to fit the lyrics to the next verses to that rhythm....

I'll have to have another look, see if there are things I can tweak....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-120176 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-120127 Thu, 25 Aug 2005 06:21:30 +0000
Me likes. Good progression, and nice honesty with the audience and with yourself. I have a few problems with some of the middle parts of a few of your triplets.

Specifically,
Till I felt I was going insane and Now I longer care I bet you could tweak these to make them a bit more interesting. Even just rewording the sentence leading up to the rhyming word such that the rhyming work comes as more of a surprise would help.

Maybe instead of:
I screamed at you in my pain,
Till I felt I was going insane,
You rejected me, again and again... you could try:

I screamed at you in my pain,
Silent reply drives me insane,
You rejected me, again and again...

See what I mean? It's not great, but something along those lines, I think, would make your song even stronger.

Can't wait to hear it.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-120127 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-120126 Thu, 25 Aug 2005 06:21:15 +0000
I know what you mean about the song taking a u-turn.

I had the same thing happen with my song The Journey
where I thought it was going to a simple love song and
it turn into something completely different.

I like the way this came out I think the topic of unanswered
prayers lends itself better to gloomy than to bouncy.

One thing:

On the lineNow I longer care, Do you mean?

Now I NO longer care.

Can't wait to hear it.

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-120126 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-11206 Thu, 25 Aug 2005 05:52:25 +0000
It started out as a jolly little sing-along, tried a finger-picked riff for it, it ended up as a gloomy doomy minor-chord dominated piece with palm-muted electric guitar....

anyway, for better or worse, here's this week's effort....

I Never Believed

I asked but I never received,
Asked for truth, but I was deceived,
Maybe, because I never believed?

I prayed but no replies,
To my pleas and my my cries,
Until finally, all my hopes died...

I screamed at you in my pain,
Till I felt I was going insane,
You rejected me, again and again...

There's only so much a man can bear,
Now I no longer care,
'Cause I know you're not there....


I asked but I never received,,
Asked for truth, but I was deceived,
Maybe, because I never believed?

It starts off quietly, with an almost whispered vocal, and builds to an angry, anguished scream....I'll try and record a rough demo when, or rather if, I get a spare few minutes.....

Vic.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-42-i-never-believed/#post-11206