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Darrell was that one guy who had been part of panterra and then as they split up formed another band, right? saw it in the news yesterday... hell he died because a fu.cking idiot thought he was the reason for panterra's split? jesus, even if he was the reason, he had every fu.cking right, had he not?
I agree with you lotto king, very sad sad world. no one deserves to be killed.

as for your song, I love the chorus and the ending is very well-written, too. also the lennon reference fits well, I think, and adds to the song. I don't think you need another verse but if you can come up with one it would be cool, too. either way works for me.

go well
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79337 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79270 Sat, 11 Dec 2004 01:13:06 +0000
no-one and I mean no-one deserves to to be killed for no reason one can argue about war criminals / other criminals but for christ sake we are talking about people like us ( very much more talented than I ) doin what we love doin " MUSIC"

sad day yes very sad

keep on rocking

:cry: :cry:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79270 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79198 Fri, 10 Dec 2004 18:05:47 +0000
Good stuff dog.

One thing - the last line of the chorus being a question didn't work for me somehow.
It could just be me, in which case, fair enough, but how about:

...
Just take your gun and aim
Try to comfort your soul.
...

-or something like that?

Just a thought - well written (so far!).

G]]> Sunday Songwriters Group gjbrake https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79198 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79169 Fri, 10 Dec 2004 14:01:25 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79169 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79160 Fri, 10 Dec 2004 12:27:21 +0000 yes I agree there is probably more one could say " but why say to much sometimes shortness is all one has to say to get point across ."

this part in particular says alot to me

Get up and run
donkey hole with a gun
Shots drown the screams
This isn't a dream

I like it the way it is if time is your question ? then I'm sure your musical talents could fill in any gaps

I FOR ONE LIKE IT AS IT IS

CHEERS 8)

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-79160 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-5465 Fri, 10 Dec 2004 02:36:42 +0000
This is a folk-rock song(I think Vic has influenced me a bit this week)
This is kind of short but i don't think there is a lot more to say here :-( maybe later?

December 8th

Chorus
If were not carful to utilize
Obvious lessons in the cronicles of time
Then we choose the killing times
Then its just history, we kill five more

verse
We killed john lennon
Twenty years ago today
Now we kill five more
As they take the stage
When you have this anger
You can't control
Just take your gun and aim
Does it comfort your soul?

Bridge/instumental break

Get up and run
Ass hole with a gun
Shots drown the screams
This isn't a dream]]> Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/week-5-december-8th/#post-5465