https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 19:50:26 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65211 Mon, 16 Aug 2004 18:45:35 +0000
Years and years have passed me by
Years of fighting, years of lies
I'm so tired, my head pounds
But the music inside me's still not found

Telling myself that it's okay
Going back to it next day
All my thoughts, all my feelings
Passed into this guitar's strings

(Chorus:)

And the sweat pours down my face...
And the sweat pours down my face...
And the sweat pours down my

Practice makes perfect, they said
But all I feel is like I'm dead
My mind is mush, I can't see straight
Keep telling myself I will be great

But then I wake up one day
Find my fingers still are playing
Finallly see the sun is shining
Tears of joy off I am crying

(Bridge:)
And now I stand here on stage
An older guitar mage
And wait for you to here my-- song...

(solo(s?))

Now back to all the sleepless nights
But less of those internal fights
My mind at ease I concentrate
On what it takes to be great

(chorus)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group watermelon_man https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65211 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65189 Mon, 16 Aug 2004 04:18:54 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group bluenotefla https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65189 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65161 Sun, 15 Aug 2004 18:37:40 +0000 Will keep trying. Thank u]]> Sunday Songwriters Group watermelon_man https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65161 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65082 Sat, 14 Aug 2004 02:42:25 +0000 And the sweat pours down my face...
And the sweat pours down my face...
And the sweat pours down my

I wake up one day
Find my fingers still are playing
Throw back the curtains, the sun is shining
Wipe the tears off I am crying First your sweating and then you wake up one day and you find your crying. why are you crying? Is is from playing guitar? Is the sun to bright? Did someone kick you in...(Lol Just kidding). detail is needed here.

Another thing that is needed here is consistancy. you jump from about 3 lines to 4 lines randomly. try and keep the lines as consistant as you can. say... make them all about 4 lines long or 3 lines long. one or two little deviations from that wont hurt too much. Also the length of each line should be kept as consistant as possible because the more words the longer it takes to sing and the less equals the shorter it takes to sing. See what I mean?

And now I stand here on stage
An older guitar mage
And wait for you to here my-- song... I like the sound of this but how about:

And And now I stand here on stage,
Wait for you to hear my song,
An old guitar Mage,
Lets all sing along,


Sorry for going back to the begining while im at the end of my post but in your first stanza:
So many sleepless nights
So many internal fights
My fingers bleed and my ears pound
But the music inside's still not found What are the internal fights about? why are you bleeding and your ears pounding? is it from the music? is the music stuck in your head? What music was not found? see the listener should not be left high and dry looking for more info. They should be grasped and intregued and want to hear more.

Bstguitarist,
Hope I helped and welcome to Guitarnoise.com forums Hope you keep writing.
:lol:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group bstguitarist https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-65082 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-3110 Sat, 14 Aug 2004 00:44:42 +0000 The first one is obviously most of the chorus, but the second one, a line from the bridge, struck me profoundly. What do you think?:

So many sleepless nights
So many internal fights
My fingers bleed and my ears pound
But the music inside's still not found

Lots of hate and lots of love
Flowing through my hand's skin glove
To the strings under my palm
Time and time and time again

(Chorus:)

And the sweat pours down my face...
And the sweat pours down my face...
And the sweat pours down my

I wake up one day
Find my fingers still are playing
Throw back the curtains, the sun is shining
Wipe the tears off I am crying

(Bridge:)
And now I stand here on stage
An older guitar mage
And wait for you to here my-- song...

(solo(s?))

Now back to all the sleepless nights
But less of those internal fights
My mind at ease I concentrate
On what it takes to be great

(chorus)

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No, the chorus is not a typo, but instead of singing the last word of the third line in the chorus, which falls on beat 1, I would sing the first word of the next verse. Obviously, on the chorus at the end, I would sing the last word. I debated putting a chorus after the third verse, before the bridge, but decided against it. Please respond, even if it is the next week (or at least read)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group watermelon_man https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-should-i-call-it-1st-time-writer/#post-3110