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Astonishingly powerful writing

Excellent stuff

Bob 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-113408 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-113401 Sun, 24 Jul 2005 16:15:42 +0000
Joe]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-113401 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110453 Sun, 10 Jul 2005 23:22:44 +0000
pbee,
Quote:
Mutiny or immunity
im not quite sure what you mean by it but its is a cool line. Good job I was referring to the conflict of turning our backs on mankind or helping them help themselves and be immune. I guess I should change it if it's not clear enough?

SfDean,
I didn't quite get the lines Monetary savior/rely to keep afloat. Monetary savior being money.
Some of the other stanzas left me less clear about who was being addressed Yeah, I do do that. Thanks for the reminder, keep me on track!

Thanks again for all the input. G. :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group rocketgirl https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110453 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110374 Sun, 10 Jul 2005 02:01:29 +0000
Really terrific writing.

And in the second stanza of the first verse, I got a clear understanding (nice, in following the castles in the sky) that the "you" being addressed was those in power. ("Show us the solution...put shovels in our hands, end death by dirty water.")

Some of the other stanzas left me less clear about who was being addressed. (But that may be my befuddlement, not the lyric.) I didn't quite get the lines Monetary savior/rely to keep afloat.

Nice lyrics.

SfDean.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group sfdean https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110374 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110363 Sat, 09 Jul 2005 22:38:15 +0000
Lots of good lines here, my favourite being:
Trade justice for free trade A bit of a tongue twister for the vocalist I would think, but its a very succinct statement of the true problem.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110363 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110327 Sat, 09 Jul 2005 07:37:20 +0000
this is a nice song. I like the chorus too especially the illiteration of the first line Mutiny or immunity im not quite sure what you mean by it but its is a cool line. Good job :D .

pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110327 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110317 Sat, 09 Jul 2005 06:19:52 +0000
:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110317 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110305 Sat, 09 Jul 2005 05:10:21 +0000
I like it !
Give more than a medicine kiss That's a Great line

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-110305 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-10123 Fri, 08 Jul 2005 23:34:51 +0000 Please note, to writers I have not critiqued. Please don't think I am ignoring you, I just don't want to duplicate what somebody else has already said.

What Love Would Do
© 2005 Gwynne

Sleeping only to put behind
Another hungry day
As castles in the sky
Trade justice for free trade

Show us the solution
For more than our daughters
Put shovels in our hands
End death by dirty water

Chorus
Mutiny or immunity
Voices carry from me to you
Lie in wait or educate
Know what love would do

Everybody's watching
And haunted by their eyes
Never touching bottom
Going on about their lives

Monetary savior
Rely to keep afloat
Given a chance to sail
We'll open the door of hope

Chorus

Bridge
Free rock in the free world
Give more than a medicine kiss
Save our boys and girls
Add my name to the list]]> Sunday Songwriters Group rocketgirl https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/what-would-love-do/#post-10123