https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 19:39:49 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133776 Thu, 20 Oct 2005 06:17:42 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Mellowmood https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133776 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133755 Thu, 20 Oct 2005 03:33:49 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133755 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133748 Thu, 20 Oct 2005 02:54:48 +0000
If this were my novel my editor would probably make me clarify that. This being a song, where I don't have several hundred pages to get my point across, I was kind of hoping I wouldn't need to clarify--but apparently I do.

I liked your idea, except I have a feeling if I changed it to “You wonder” I'd have people confused that in the verse I say “You” and in the chorus I say “She.” I'd thought, even before your suggestion, of changing “She” to “You” but for some reason it doesn't sound as good to me--though that could be just because I'm used to “She.” So, opinions on that are welcome.


As for the ending? Well, I hadn't really seen an ending, since the song was basically about the actual pining and uncertainty, but I changed the last chorus to give some sort of closure--maybe not the kind you'd want-- she might still not be there, but at least I'm not still sitting in front of that da*n window.

See if the changes above work for you. Thanks.



Joe]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133748 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133630 Wed, 19 Oct 2005 12:16:46 +0000
This is lovely piece of writting I enjoyed it very much , but the down side of course (isn't there always a down side in life ? ) I agree with PBee and one little bit that just does not ( only for me ) seem to fit is the following .

"Will it be worth "

the word worth just doesn't flow like the others I think it sounds better with out that line .


but of course this is only my opinion and seems as though I can't write songs you could probably just ignore me . But that's my 5 cents worth Joe

nice Joe real nice

hilch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133630 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133513 Tue, 18 Oct 2005 23:24:25 +0000
Definitely some pining going on in there. There are only a couple of things Id like to say. Firstly, and its just a matter of style I guess but Id like to see some closure to the song, maybe that last chorus could tell us something, I just feel that the song is too open ended.
Secondly, verses 2 & 4 for me are at odds with the chorus, in the sense that in V2 & V4 your wondering why you don't want to go home, but the chorus clearly tells us that you do know why you don't want to go home,
Maybe: Your wondering why…. And And you wonder why …. Other than that, I think youve captured the situation quite well, good stuff :D .

Cheers
pbee]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-133513 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/will-she-be-waiting-week-50/#post-12529 Mon, 17 Oct 2005 00:51:09 +0000
Will She Be Waiting
©2005JKovak


It's five o'clock
Time to go home
I sit at the window
Here all alone

Wonderin' why
I can't seem to smile
At the thought of bein'
Home in a while

Will she be waiting
To tell me she's changed her mind
Will it be worth
All the time that I pined
Will she be waiting
Waiting for me at home
Will she be waiting
Or will I still be alone

It's six o'clock
The doors are locked
The cleaning crew cleans
I stare at the clock

And ask myself why
I'm not runnin' home
Is it 'cause I'm afraid
I'll be alone

Or will she be waiting
To tell me she's changed her mind
Will it be worth
All the time that I pined
Will she be waiting
Waiting for me at home
Will she be waiting
Or will I still be alone

It's nine o'clock
It's dark and lonely
The cleaning crew's gone
She hasn't phoned me

To ask me why
I haven't come home
As I sit by the window
Here all alone

Will she be waiting
To tell me she's changed her mind
Will it be worth
All the time that I pined
Will she be waiting
Waiting for me at home
Will she be waiting
Or will I still be alone

Musical Bridge

Will she be waiting
How long can I sit alone
Wonderin' if she'll be
Waiting for me at home
Will she be waiting
Or will I still be alone
I'm closin' the blinds now
It's time for me to go

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