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Thanks very much for your help!!!!!!!!!!!!

NeM H

+]]> Sunday Songwriters Group +LostBeggining+ https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/wk-19-pretending/#post-93976 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/wk-19-pretending/#post-93956 Wed, 16 Mar 2005 02:06:29 +0000
yes very nice lyrics and I agree with Celt on the changes , but it's your piece , very good though . I see your keeping up your very high standard of writting keep it up it's good .


cheers
L,K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/wk-19-pretending/#post-93956 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/wk-19-pretending/#post-93802 Tue, 15 Mar 2005 03:34:06 +0000
Nice piece. Kind of like one of Led Zepplins Tolkien influenced songs.

First of all I would lose the Cuz in the first verse and the chorus.
Not because of the bad grammar or the spelling.That doesn't bother me at all.

It just doesn't fit with the Fantasty Realm feel in the rest of the song.

In the first verse I would just lose it .
Now that you are gone nothing feels quite the same It says the same thing without the offending word

In the chorus I would change it to As if.
As if you never left this chamber of my love That's more the way a knight in armour about to enter battle would speak.

Good Work

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/wk-19-pretending/#post-93802 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/wk-19-pretending/#post-7736 Mon, 14 Mar 2005 19:16:08 +0000
Pretending

Well I gazed along the pathway where we walked through the night
Sparkling with the glow of a thousand silver lights
Spreading their glory with the virtue of the stars
And opening the flood gates for love to pour into our hearts
Cuz now that you are gone nothing feels quite the same
The path ways a stranger, the lights never felt so strange
Now I feel you in this moment as if you're here with me
I pull my hand up to the place where your face should be

But your ghost still walks these halls
With whispers of a promised touch
Your beauty still fills this room
Cuz you never left this chamber of my love

Well with two steps through the door onto the battlefield
Reflections of the moon on armour of dark steel
I raise my weapon to the sky glistening with the stars
A sword with the name of love a name as true as ours
Upon the dusty ground I head into the night
As the demons watching me fall down from the sky
I step out into the world and choking back the pain
But when I turn around your there to rescue me again]]> Sunday Songwriters Group +LostBeggining+ https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/wk-19-pretending/#post-7736