https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 15:31:23 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374332 Sun, 15 Apr 2012 15:57:12 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374332 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374284 Fri, 13 Apr 2012 22:15:31 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374284 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374272 Fri, 13 Apr 2012 16:41:38 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group hagrider https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374272 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374265 Fri, 13 Apr 2012 13:37:25 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374265 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374264 Fri, 13 Apr 2012 13:29:46 +0000
"princess on board" is supposed to be one of those stupid car-rear-window-sign things. But I do like the idea of "for hire" and will deffo try to work that one in somewhere. Things will change around a bit when I get a tune sorted.

Thanks for the feedback.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group hagrider https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374264 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374263 Fri, 13 Apr 2012 13:03:03 +0000
Good write! :D Nice job with the vivid details. We get the story by the showing not telling. I also like the title; how it misleads at first, but is appropriate after the read.

Suggestion:
his wet lips and his dry hands
and it feels like some kind of a disease

....could be

his dry lips and his wet hands
and it feels like some kind of a disease .......that sounds more of a turnoff :roll:

....also this might be work or not........instead of "princess on board" maybe "princess for hire"

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374263 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374253 Fri, 13 Apr 2012 00:33:24 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group hagrider https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374253 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374247 Thu, 12 Apr 2012 23:00:40 +0000 good work. If this was my song I would consider emphisising the the going nowhere theme even more maybe an extra line (spoken perhaps) , cos for me this is the essence of this song. Maybe something like this:
I am neither here nor there, no not anywhere
wet tyres, wheel spin
hitch my skirt and I climb in
princess on board
oh money changing hands
take me, don't take me nowhere
... Im going nowhere cheers

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374247 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374227 Thu, 12 Apr 2012 03:56:54 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group andygetch https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-374227 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-42641 Wed, 11 Apr 2012 21:59:19 +0000 So this song started from the image of a girl getting into a car on a dark rainy street, and grew from there. Quite surprised me where it went - but that is sometime the way. I would point out that I write imagined stories & rarely anything autobiographical - this one is entirely ficticious !!


Traffic

I am neither here nor there, no not anywhere
wet tyres, wheel spin
hitch my skirt and I climb in
princess on board
oh money changing hands
take me, don't take me nowhere

Must be this is a family car
wet wipes and cellophane debris
plastic low-heel shoes in a string bag
his wet lips and his dry hands
and it feels like some kind of a disease

car park industrial estate
CC reality TV
This week another milestone passed me by
my eyes closed with a wish list
I blew a candle out just for me

I am neither here nor there, no not anywhere
wet tyres, wheel spin
hitch my skirt and I climb in
princess on board
oh money changing hands
take me, don't take me nowhere

You light me a spare cigarette
warm beer and nothing said
swallow a little white pill of never mind
night shift and women's work
drop back seat for a hard bed

I am neither here nor there, no not anywhere
wet tyres, wheel spin
hitch my skirt and I climb in
princess on board
oh money changing hands
take me, don't take me nowhere]]> Sunday Songwriters Group hagrider https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y10-w24-traffic/#post-42641