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Definitely a very descriptive piece. Not sure about the modern poetry angle, unless you're figuring to use the various line breaks as a way to also break up the melody. And if that's the case, you may end up confusing your audience a bit. Perhaps not - no real way to tell without the music.

Am interested to hear a recorded version of this.

Looking forward to more.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y11-w01-sunday-building-where-people-escape/#post-379367 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y11-w01-sunday-building-where-people-escape/#post-379307 Wed, 07 Nov 2012 10:59:04 +0000
online modern poetry course, That sounds interesting.

Good use of details :D ....just one minor change to make the verb tense stay "in the now"

the spa was empty,............the spa IS empty,

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y11-w01-sunday-building-where-people-escape/#post-379307 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y11-w01-sunday-building-where-people-escape/#post-379304 Wed, 07 Nov 2012 07:03:26 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y11-w01-sunday-building-where-people-escape/#post-379304 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y11-w01-sunday-building-where-people-escape/#post-43497 Wed, 07 Nov 2012 05:08:00 +0000
spoken over a slow repeating fingerpicking progression of G Em C Am G

It's Sunday somewhere
but in this pungent building
the spa was empty,
green coat of slime on the pool side
a quiet place where people escaped

Deck covered the pool
a morning frozen
Abstract interpretations of ancient writings
by men
from inspiration
Awakening awash
Four horseman rode from a plywood platform
Witnesses
above the sheaths
sing righteous songs where people escape

Brothers replaced by recovery
Seeking serenity
Picking up pieces from shattered structure
Look for
serenity
Stale cigarettes
coffee, ground to hold on to
taking
one day at a time
surrendering steps where people escape

Recovery turned over to runaways
Seeking a safe place
Visiting
day for
security
Its now a safe house
everyone's looking for something higher
praying
just a matter of time
dilapidating place where people escape

To tear down
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