https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 11:16:23 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384187 Wed, 22 Jan 2014 12:30:54 +0000
The lyrics are intriguing. I don't have a handle on what is going on, but that's not a bad thing. I like the music a lot, but I'm sure you'll want to distance your own song in some way.

I have found this kind of lyric difficult to complete because one keeps running the other person's melody through it.....maybe try a switch of genre to add new music or change the time from 4/4 to 3/4 etc.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384187 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384148 Sun, 19 Jan 2014 14:50:41 +0000
Maybe I tried to cram too much into one song. In addition to the gay one night stand I tried to talk about depression and how it comes in between people. With Elliott Smith as the depression poster child, ‘you’ with a pitch black mood, ‘I’ unable to reach him despite recognizing depressed feelings. And closer to this week’s theme, about how you can feel a song belongs to you and you alone. Hence ‘you’ stealing the CD, and then me making new lyrics to an Elliott Smith song in order to make it my own again.

Lots of explanation necessary... I tried to show not tell, but maybe it becomes more clear if I work the actual word depression into the lyrics somewhere.

I'd love to hear your thoughts Vic!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Sunnydunes https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384148 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384145 Sun, 19 Jan 2014 03:55:03 +0000
:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384145 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384141 Sat, 18 Jan 2014 00:34:53 +0000
I like it :D . My take here that this is about a gay one night stand, if so I think that I would expand on this theme a bit. Why this is different from any other one night stand. The other thing that jumps out at me is the pain allusion, I need to know more, it just kind of jumped out unexpectedly. Maybe it's because our subject is in conflict with his own sexuality, doubts and societal pressure, I dont know. For me all of these are great fodder for a song.
I think using someone else song as a source and starting point is a very valid technique which I have used myself on a few occasions, the tough part is when / if you finally put your own music to it, sometimes the lyrics need to be rewritten and can loose their edge.

Cheers

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-384141 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-44978 Wed, 15 Jan 2014 02:36:29 +0000
To the tune of Oh Well, Okay.

Got a CD I just don’t see it any more
It was Elliot Smith’s XO that I had of yore
But I guess you took it and I will not blame you
Me a tourist for your pitch black mood
A shrink pretend to save the day
Oh well, okay

Hollywood had taught me love, me I had no clue
Never let them come to near, except now for you
I needed your love but I took your body
In the comfort of your Mary Jane
Self medicate the pain away
Oh well, okay

In the morning panic strikes as you realize
Night spent with another guy; try to stop your cries
Playing you your songs doesn’t work together
Recognition for your pitch black mood
But you’re not feeling all that gay
Oh well, okay

Should you ever see me and still feel guilty
Tell me you have it and it’s okay
Cause boy I know it’s hard to say
Oh well, okay
Oh well, okay
Oh well, okay]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Sunnydunes https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w11-oh-well-okay/#post-44978