https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 16:25:38 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384404 Sun, 09 Feb 2014 01:49:43 +0000
But if you do have musical ideas, that's a good start. And giving us a musical
overview, as you did, certainly helps. Can definitely get the punk / power chord vibe off this. Well done.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384404 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384392 Sat, 08 Feb 2014 08:06:05 +0000 I don't know if he is still posting on this forum.

When he was looking for a name for the song, I suggested Warlock Waltz.
I only thought of it because you had the word waltz in it . . .
and the song is great guitar playing and this was an excuse to get others to hear it.

https://app.box.com/shared/hrd3twp440]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384392 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384380 Thu, 06 Feb 2014 17:58:42 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group glprattimages https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384380 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384359 Tue, 04 Feb 2014 23:01:05 +0000 I think there is a balance between what is said and what is left unsaid and you as the author have decide how much of each. What James is saying is valid, but for me not being so explicit allows the listener to make up their own story. Its a fine balance cos generally in a live situation the audience wont hear most of what is sung anyway.

cheers
Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384359 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384350 Tue, 04 Feb 2014 13:30:43 +0000
In a room full of memories –Where is the room? A house? Bed room? Attic? Kid’s room? Basement? Garage? Etc....Ballet studio? A hospital? Commercial building? Boxing ring? Prison cell? Government building?
What types of memories? Happy? Sad? Shared? Family? Historic?

I sit all alone- Why sitting? Physically unable? Tired? Job related? Why not dancing?

Looking in the mirror- Why mirror? Does this room typically have a mirror?

Staring into the unknown- what is unknown? Past? Present? Future? What happened in the room? What happened outside the room?

The haunting images- images of what/who in the room? Outside the room?

seared into my brain- indicts fire self-inflicted? Damage done by friend, family, enemy?

Memories of the past
Drive me insane---why “drive” that is a road metaphor/image try to find image from within the room...what actions or behaviors could "show" insane instead of tell?

Spin and turn- how when sitting? When the physical action between sitting and standing take place? Who or what is doing the action?
twist and twirl
A macabre tango
With demons of the past- self-inflicted? Just or unjust consequence of actions?

I dance with ghosts
Haunted by my past- personal choices? Job related? Reactionary? Pro-active? Vengeful? Apathy?

All along I'm hoping- who has control? Self? Demon? Another person?
The nightmares won't last- why not leave the room?

spin and turn
twist and twirl
A bizarre waltz- tango indicates passion waltz is more refined or controlled movements....why the change of dance style....explore the implications of both
With demons of the past

So these are all questions I cannot find in the lyrics but choosing some aspects to focus on will bring character to the lyrics.

Take or toss as you see fit]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384350 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384347 Mon, 03 Feb 2014 19:08:06 +0000 James, can you give me an example of what you're suggesting? I ask because I tried a couple of lines I thought were close to what you are talking about in my original draft and they didn't seem to fit.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group glprattimages https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384347 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384342 Mon, 03 Feb 2014 14:23:16 +0000
I like the brevity of the lines, but they are doing well at conveying the mood.

Suggestion: Consider calling out some of those demons or ghosts by name so the reader/listener can be on the same page as to why the singer is feeling tormented.

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384342 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384338 Sun, 02 Feb 2014 21:10:34 +0000
One line seems a bit confusing:
"I dance with ghosts
Haunted by my past"

It reads like the ghosts are haunted by your past. Perhaps something like this, but less wordy.
"I dance with ghosts
haunting me from my past"]]> Sunday Songwriters Group rparker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-384338 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-45036 Sun, 02 Feb 2014 20:15:30 +0000
Dancing With Ghosts

In a room full of memories
I sit all alone

Looking in the mirror
Staring into the unknown

The haunting images
seared into my brain

Memories of the past
Drive me insane

Spin and turn
twist and twirl
A macabre tango
With demons of the past

I dance with ghosts
Haunted by my past

All along I'm hoping
The nightmares won't last

spin and turn
twist and twirl
A bizarre waltz
With demons of the past]]> Sunday Songwriters Group glprattimages https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12-w14/#post-45036