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Thanks for coming back for another listen and the confirmation. :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384998 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384997 Sat, 07 Jun 2014 18:00:26 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384997 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384996 Fri, 06 Jun 2014 16:37:56 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384996 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384995 Fri, 06 Jun 2014 15:54:10 +0000 How about adding jealousy, the hero gets the fame, gets the girl. The sidekick gets to be the comic relief. Those are good aspects to explore, but I was just sticking with the loyal sidekick that really likes his/her job. It's just that each verse really says the same thing. Yes, there is no story line, build, or twist....it's basically examples of loyalty or co-dependency.
I liked the touch of delay on the vocals rather than nailing the beats like a robot. That's good to hear since I tried a new plug-in on the vocal.
The cymbals were distracting. I can play around with that.....Thanks for the FYI

Thanks for the listen and post :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384995 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384994 Fri, 06 Jun 2014 15:44:51 +0000 I don't have a problem with mixed metaphors. It's just that each verse really says the same thing. How about adding jealousy, the hero gets the fame, gets the girl. The sidekick gets to be the comic relief.

I liked the touch of delay on the vocals rather than nailing the beats like a robot.
The cymbals were distracting. I didn't care for the drum track till you got to the toms in:
I know that look in your eyes
There’s no changing your mind
So in that dark hour when you need me most
I’ll be by your side
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384994 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384993 Fri, 06 Jun 2014 13:52:21 +0000
Here are some verses that didn't get in the song, but maybe they should.....

If you’re the bow, the bow, the bow
I’m the quiver
If you’re the fear, the fear, the fear
I’m the shiver

If you’re the plague, the plague, the plague
I’m the rashes
If you’re the flame, the flame, the flame
I’m the ashes]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384993 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384992 Fri, 06 Jun 2014 02:03:01 +0000 there are lots of unrelated metaphors here and I don't think it works. Yes, it goes against the idea Pat Pattison presents that if you use metaphors, stick to one, if you want multiple images use similes.

I was trying to keep the dependent relationship within each metaphor the same. I know "King of Pain" has a lot of metaphors

http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/police/kingofpain.html

....but after rereading the lyrics just now, I do see Sting has "themes" in each verse
1 inanimate objects up high
2 animals in nature dead or dying
3 men
4 a mix of ideas from 1, 2, 3

....and it rhymes....no wonder it's such a great song :wink:

...also David's example from last week of the song "One More Minute" (Weird Al Yankovich) http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/weirdalyankovic/onemoreminute.html

....it has a lot of random images, but they are all ideas of unpleasant acts.
Maybe if you stuck with weapons Good suggestion. That would seem to be something that could help, or at least get themes in the verses...I see all my metaphors are inanimate objects but one, but I should rethink the themes in relation to "super heroes" to support the chorus

I got a bit stuck trying to get ideas to rhyme and defaulted to rhymes leading the ideas....similar to twisting a line for rhymes sake....not a good thing to do :roll:

I had a feeling about 1/3 of the way into this assignment that it wasn't going to end great, but I pushed ahead with the "less than great" idea, so I least I gained some learning experience from the analysis of why it didn't work....

....I'll put the muse to work on it and see if the day/song can be rescued :P

so.....Thanks for the listen and post :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384992 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384991 Thu, 05 Jun 2014 22:20:41 +0000
Maybe if you stuck with weapons, it would work. Sword and shield, bullet and rifle, stone and slingshot.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-384991 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-45345 Thu, 05 Jun 2014 14:19:55 +0000
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=====Revised Version=====

If you’re the sword, the sword, the sword
I’m the strong shield
If you’re the bomb, the bomb, the bomb
I’m the mine field

If you’re the fang, the fang, the fang
I’m the snake bite
If you’re the axe, the axe, the axe
I’m the war cry

Chorus
I’m the sidekick; the sidekick
Your boots are much too big for me to fill
But it’s my biggest thrill to keep you from getting killed

If you’re the mace, the mace, the mace
I’m the spray can
If you’re the noose, the noose, the noose
I’m the hangman

If you’re the judge, the judge, judge
I’m the jury
If you’re the fist, the fist, the fist
I’m the furry

chorus

I know that look in your eyes
There’s no changing your mind
So in that dark hour when you need me most
I’ll be by your side

chorus

And I will; yes, I will
And I will; yes, I will
 



=====Original Version=====
If you’re the blade, the blade, the blade
I’m the handle
If you’re the flame, the flame, the flame
I’m the candle

If you’re the foot, the foot, the foot
I’m the sandal
If you’re the rag, the rag, the rag
I’m the scandal

Chorus
I’m the sidekick; the sidekick
Your boots are much too big for me to fill
But it’s my biggest thrill to keep you from getting killed

If you’re the wheel, the wheel, the wheel
I’m the hubcap
If you’re the porch, the porch, the porch
I’m the doormat

If you’re the stamp, the stamp, the stamp
I’m the inkpad
If you’re the graduating class
I’m your mom and dad

chorus

I know that look in your eyes
There’s no changing your mind
So in that dark hour when you need me most
I’ll be by your side

chorus

And I will; yes, I will
And I will; yes, I will]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w31-the-sidekick/#post-45345