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Nice work with the revised version :D

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385065 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385058 Thu, 19 Jun 2014 17:03:45 +0000
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=832466&songID=12821626

verse:

After you've read the news,
After you've seen everyone's views.
After you've checked your email,
After you've looked at each link in detail.
After you're done.

verse:

I can wait until you're through,
Until you're done with the next thing too.
Maybe we'll go out then.
Maybe we'll even visit friends
After you're done.

verse:

Our daughter watches videos of pets.
Our son plays with kids that he's never met.
We should take them to the park
If it isn't already dark
After you're done.

interlude:

Will we live happily
After you're done?
Will we still be a family
After you're done?

verse:

We've become an afterthought,
I don't mean to put you on the spot.
You'll get around to us in time.
Don't worry. We'll be fine
After you're done.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385058 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385038 Sat, 14 Jun 2014 19:48:40 +0000 When everyone's gone.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385038 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385032 Sat, 14 Jun 2014 06:38:34 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385032 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385028 Fri, 13 Jun 2014 20:14:07 +0000
After you're done
After you're done
Take a good look around
After you're done
After you're done
And the time is gone]]> Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385028 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385026 Fri, 13 Jun 2014 19:52:32 +0000
Our daughter watches videos of pets.
Our son plays with kids that he's never met.
We should take them to the park
If it isn't already dark
After you're done.

If I add another verse with the kids response, I may have to throw in an interlude. Otherwise, it's too much of the same thing. Such a verse could include something like "we're all afterthoughts."]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385026 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385023 Fri, 13 Jun 2014 06:17:00 +0000
Great! :mrgreen: I really like your chords and playing on this one; especially at the very end.

The topic is very relatable....unfortunately so :oops:

Suggestion: Consider the singer not being so "ok" with being an "afterthought" or maybe add a bit of a twist....."it's ok you're my afterthought too", or the singer dismisses time with the kids b/c of computer time....and the kids can say the same thing back to the parents...etc.

Thanks for sharing. :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-385023 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-45353 Thu, 12 Jun 2014 17:38:26 +0000
(edit: see revised version in 6/19/2014 post below)

Original version:

After you've read the news,
After you've seen everyone's views.
After you've checked your email,
After you've looked at each link in detail.
After you're done.

I can wait until you're through,
Until you're done with the next thing too.
Maybe we'll go out then.
Maybe we'll even visit friends
After you're done.

I've become an afterthought,
I don't mean to put you on the spot.
You'll get around to me in time.
Don't worry. I'll be fine
After you're done.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y12w32-after-youre-done/#post-45353