https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 15:31:22 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-121084 Mon, 29 Aug 2005 17:08:33 +0000 http://www.soundclick.com/artist/2/whateverkeepsyouupatnight_music.htm) please let me have a feedback(it's just a quick demo with the simplest(?) chords, but anyway...) :wink:

thanks for encouraging, no worries, I'll try both(almost never on purpose though).

cheers,
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-121084 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120934 Sun, 28 Aug 2005 15:34:34 +0000
Good and simple song. As long as you've got a melody that works with it it'll be fine.

As for the complex v simple debate - it doesn't actually matter. Vic has it right when he says write for yourself and Slowplay's encouragement to write outside your normal style is also worth heeding. If you can do them both you've more strings to your bow and you'll only continue to improve as Ja'mir says.

Good stuff - let's hear it.

Bob :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120934 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120807 Sat, 27 Aug 2005 18:38:22 +0000
You're a good writer and that shows beyond the particular style you choose.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120807 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120805 Sat, 27 Aug 2005 18:27:07 +0000
glad someone liked it.
vic, don't be worried I write those long tangled things anyway, could never make myself really stop, I think(though I was insecure, I admit it). but you know, it happened before, some simple lines flowing out of me.... I didn't really force anything with this piece, it's just a small something I sorta like;) maybe you can relate to it better when listening to the demo I just put up on my soundclick page(http://www.soundclick.com/artist/2/whateverkeepsyouupatnight_music.htm).
hope someone likes that, too:)
(is it how you imagined it, slowplay?)

oh and the title- for now it stayed "attempt...", working title maybe, I'll see. thank you, the celt, for your suggestion, but somehow I would not like to involve a name......I dunno

thanks everyone for your replies :D
cheers,
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120805 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120714 Sat, 27 Aug 2005 06:43:57 +0000
There are some good lines here, but - like I told you then, and I'll tell you again now....be true to yourself, write for yourself, not other people... if you like your song, other people will....

Go back to doing what you do best Anne,(and you do it better than 99% of the people on this forum!) - I like those long, poetic, image-laden songs, they're not always easy to pick up on or understand, but that's half of their charm...you have to go back and read them again, just to make sure you get the right interpretation...and any song that you keep going back to, by definition, has to have something going for it...

I want the old (LOL) BNA back....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120714 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120395 Fri, 26 Aug 2005 07:00:53 +0000
Good Job!

I like that it's repetitive it gives the song a sense of desparation
and desire.

As for a title I would suggest you look outside the lyric.

My thought would to name it for the person it is sung to.

Something like;

For Jason or Micheal's Song

Sometimes you don't want to give away too much
in the title.

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120395 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120208 Thu, 25 Aug 2005 19:01:33 +0000
Good reading, and I love the simplicity, you've come a long way girl !!!!!

Go well
Ja'mir]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120208 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120081 Thu, 25 Aug 2005 04:35:14 +0000
Well, I can't deny that it is repetitive, but I still like it. This is the type of song that hinges on the melody, and since you've got one you like, I'd love to hear it. I can see a happy bouncy song or a more ambient primarilly vocal piece.

I like the honesty too. It's not the over-the-top gushing of a standard love song. Good work.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-120081 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-11186 Wed, 24 Aug 2005 16:54:28 +0000

I wanted to be happy, but sadness never leaves me-
These roots carry a whole tree.
I wanted to be happy, but the pain never leaves me-
Or if it does, only for a while
I've been sick and I'll get sick again
But now I got someone to hold my hand

I've got some songs that might do
And someone to sing to
I've got a few songs that might do
And someone to sing to
So why do I care if the pain's still there?

I've got some songs that might do
Got someone to sing to
And I really think you like some of them, too
And I really think you like me, too
So why do I care if the pain's still there
Oh why do I care if the fear's still there
Why do I care they'll never leave here

I've got some songs that might do
And someone to sing to
And I really think you like me, too
I've got some songs that might do,
Someone to sing to
And I really think you like
And I really think you like me, too
Yes, you gotta know, I tell you all the time, but you gotta know
I like you, too

just a simple, short, repetitive piece this time, the first verse was added last and I'm not sure it needs to be there at all or maybe I should split it and spread it out through the whole thing? the other part just flowed out of my mouth in some kinda melody and I like it even though it's repetitive.
as for the title... uh, got some options, none of them really good I think...
- Attempt at being content
- To sing to
- Someone to sing to
- I should be at ease
- Hoping that my tears won't drive you off
....help?.....

cheers,
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week42-attempt-at-being-content/#post-11186