https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 16:26:00 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-122680 Mon, 05 Sep 2005 15:08:38 +0000 glad you like it.
Only line I wasn't sure about was the parachute one. Is there a flower by that name? joe, I don't think there's a flower by that name, I just thought a parachute looks like a flower when opening, besides 'bloomed' kinda rhymed with 'parachutes' in a way....;)
should this not be :
I'll surely die ?
rather then :
I'll sure die I think I've heard people use 'sure' that way before, it's most likely slang, but I thought you can say that... can't you? then no problem it'll have to change.

yes, there's no constant rhythm, ja'mir, but I had some kind of rhythm in my head though. :wink:

slowplay, you're right I could drop the two parts you mentioned, but they're there for reasons of rhyming and rhythm...:)

thank you all, I'm happy;)
cheers,
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-122680 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-122437 Sat, 03 Sep 2005 19:23:29 +0000
Loved the line: like breathing on the moon- bound to fail Great image. You could probably drop the part about 'bound to fail'. The 'breathing on the moon' part definitely implies failure. I'm guessing it's there to fit your to fit your rhythm though.

Also liked: Tear out my forked tongue in a rage
Man, the scene that this line paints in my head is great. Again, you could probably drop the 'in a rage' part since the image is pretty violent.

Good work.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-122437 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-122110 Fri, 02 Sep 2005 12:18:51 +0000 I am really battling to find a constant rhythm to the lyrics here, , but as you know i am one of those who prefer your simple ones !!!!! not knocking this, the content is fine but can't put it to a best of any kind

Go well
Ja'mir]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-122110 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121719 Thu, 01 Sep 2005 00:35:27 +0000 this is really good writing. I like the way the song progresses from an object, to another person (could be yourself in the 3rd person) and then to yourself (in the 1st person) thats nice, it cleary directs the song to those last two very good lines.
For me this is up there as one on my favourites, well done :D .

pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121719 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121698 Wed, 31 Aug 2005 22:58:50 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group PoeticSmile https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121698 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121473 Wed, 31 Aug 2005 01:39:28 +0000
Welcome back this is the stuff I enjoy from you , one question though
should this not be :

I'll surely die ?

rather then :

I'll sure die

thats my only problem

Well done great lines once again from you such as

Before you tear out my forked tongue in a rage

and

Everyone wavering knows it's so tempting

great stuff well done again :wink:

cheers

L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121473 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121318 Tue, 30 Aug 2005 17:26:06 +0000
Joe]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-121318 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y3week43-the-weakest-link/#post-11304 Mon, 29 Aug 2005 17:04:29 +0000
The weakest link

It's like stains on the wall of an ancient hall
Where parts of the mural gave in
-yes, it's always the weakest link-
Giving in-
Everyone wavering knows it's so tempting

Above all when you have no word to cling to
Or no strength to keep a vow you made to yourself
When you were still someone else

You'd probably weep if I were to tell
That this is who you'll become
A journal might be your witness, but it'll support my case
And you'll find all your promises are like parachutes which never bloomed,
Like the weather- seldom reliable, like breathing on the moon- bound to fail

Take a break.
Before you tear out my forked tongue in a rage
I have shared your cup
At the age of seven I swore to myself
I'd never get lowered into the ground like that
Too sad time seems to have a sturdier grip than mine slipping in sweat
I'll sure die

And as the seasons elapse I'm beginning to lose my faith
In the phrase that it will all work out

hope you like it.
cheers,
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