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Joe]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-229613 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-229470 Sun, 18 Feb 2007 16:15:32 +0000
dhodge... principal.. well... all that comes from what it was originally .. something like imagining someone inside a glass cell, seeing the outside, but hearing only his/her own thoughts.. or no thoughts.. and the feeling he/she tried to overcome is even more dominant, isolated in his hands, that have no idea what to do with it.. well... maybe.. the line has indeed become useless now that the other stuff before changed a bit..

marv.. thanks.. i'll try my best(which is not very good/advanced..)

wow, trevor, what a compliment;-) you're a minority :D

oh, vic, you caught me right away.. nooo... no practising, you're right.. :oops:
seperate recording has always been difficult for me to do.. but i got some free time ahead and will try again:-) throwing in a couple of minor 7ths.. way over my head :lol: .. gotta look them up ...

thank you everyone :D
hope i get my lazy fingers and my lazy mouth to do some re-recordings that sound better... :wink:
cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-229470 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-229194 Sat, 17 Feb 2007 02:17:50 +0000
The feeling principal in your hands ...... "heart" might work better than "hands" in that line....

The melody seems to work fine - but you could try throwing in a couple of minor 7ths, give it a slightly more relaxed feel....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-229194 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-229189 Sat, 17 Feb 2007 01:40:33 +0000
Well my first comment is what a lovely voice ... very female dylanish mm

Hope you know what I mean { I enjoyed listening to you }


I hope you continue to record , { a fan }

I like the imagery you have in here ..


Well done I say

Keep it up

Trevor]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-229189 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-228550 Tue, 13 Feb 2007 00:19:14 +0000
I would try to tighten this song up melodically as opposed to lyrically. I would say you have a well written poem here and with the right work it could be a good song.

Good work so far... I just feel you have a little ways to go on this one.

-marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MarvelousOptimist https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-228550 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-228459 Mon, 12 Feb 2007 15:31:24 +0000
You've got a good start here. I like the Rickie Lee Jones-like feel the song has and the melody, with its gentle rise and fall, does bring the ocean and waves vividly to mind.

It especially goes well with these lines:
But no matter where you've been going/you went
The horizon stayed the same The middle section seems to lose the flow a little:
Sleeping in strangers' beds
Facing a stranger set of houses and alleys and lanes
Put you in the saddest state
Of hearing only the static in your head
The feeling principal in your hands And I'm not sure if it's because my ear wants to hear the rhythm you've already set up (which would mean tweaking a few lines - possibly lengthening the first one) or something totally different. I've got to listen a few more times and think about it.

But the last line in this section really seems to come out of nowhere and doesn't really fit all that well. Not really sure if you even need it...

Looking forward to more.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-228459 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-23923 Sun, 11 Feb 2007 20:59:52 +0000
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=261882

Away in Waves

Spending all too much time on trains
Won't chase this feeling away
You've been dragging ‘long for months

You thought moving about the place
Would slowly fill up your head
With other and more pleasant things

But no matter where you've been going/you went
The horizon stayed the same

Sleeping in strangers' beds
Facing a stranger set of houses and alleys and lanes
Put you in the saddest state
Of hearing only the static in your head
The feeling principal in your hands
And no matter where you'd be going
The horizon stays the same

So don't lose your footing again
Settle in a familiar space
And let time, like the ocean, wear these thoughts away
Let time, like the ocean, wear them away in waves.

hope you like it.
cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y5week15-away-in-waves/#post-23923