https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 22:43:11 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-305137 Thu, 14 Aug 2008 23:23:13 +0000 the only thing that stikes me on the read is that there is no relief from the verses with a chorus or bridge so I'm interested in hearing how you dealt with that. The solos you have in between the verses certainly help with the relief, I think I would like to hear another instrument in there as well, maybe a harp or a flute. Vic, I think that this song is up there with your best, youve nailed it both lyrically and musically

cheers

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-305137 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-304604 Tue, 12 Aug 2008 02:16:40 +0000 I'll have a listen to it tonight, the only thing that stikes me on the read is that there is no relief from the verses with a chorus or bridge so I'm interested in hearing how you dealt with that.

Cheers Vic (keep em comming)

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-304604 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-304433 Sun, 10 Aug 2008 23:36:47 +0000 congrats on the 100. I liked the song. I also took a listen to some of your others. I liked them as well especially that's all right. I will find the time to go through them all eventually. Looking forward to hearing more of your stuff.

Malcolm]]> Sunday Songwriters Group maddog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-304433 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303788 Wed, 06 Aug 2008 20:22:47 +0000
Neil]]> Sunday Songwriters Group chefie https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303788 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303446 Tue, 05 Aug 2008 13:18:22 +0000
Vic, I'm still amazed at how many of those punchy little rhyming pairs you got into the lines, and how well you brought it off. And I also have to say - although it's absoloutely none of my business - how impressive and mature the sentiments are despite how personal the events depicted, and how recent. That really is something.

Our next door neighbour split up with her husband about 18 months ago now, and we've had to field much of the wreckage. If I could get her to think and live even one line of that song I'd feel that I'd really achieved something.

Cheers,

Chris]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Chris C https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303446 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303371 Tue, 05 Aug 2008 03:10:10 +0000
You kept the theme going, and got some good strong emotional stuff going, and yet also pulled off some great rhyming things too. That always looks and sounds really good when it's done, but it can be SO hard to pull off convincingly when we write. I really liked:
No aftertaste just a sense of waste

and didn't think you'd be able to pull that off again.... and then you did... :D

Gotta dash out the door now, but looking forward to listening later.

Cheers,

Chris]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Chris C https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303371 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303360 Tue, 05 Aug 2008 01:45:06 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group katreich https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303360 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303201 Mon, 04 Aug 2008 02:43:18 +0000 all going to be keepers! Nice work here.

Definitely Dylanesque, but there's also a bit of Tom Petty in there. Not to mention a big chunk of Vic (and that's the best part :wink: ). Like Ken, I'm a big fan of the way you pulled off the internal rhymes throughout this song and I think that when you get comfortable with the phrasing it's going to sound even sweeter than it does now.

Only suggestion would be that when you put in the solo, only use the first four lines of a verse and then sing the last two lines of the second verse over again:
When love first hit us and the fever gripped us, should've known it wouldn't last,
It just slipped away, day after day, and the feeling passed. Also, I'd like to suggest using "until" instead of "and" in that last line.

Can' wait to hear #101.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303201 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303178 Sun, 03 Aug 2008 23:46:55 +0000
Ah well, 'tis only a first rough demo.....I'm mulling over what to do next. I'm undecided as to whether to have two acoustic guitars, and one of them play a slide solo, or to leave the guitar as it is and to add harmonica. I'll re-record it when I make my mind up.....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303178 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303159 Sun, 03 Aug 2008 21:40:41 +0000 And the lyrics to this song are the best I have seen from you.
Just excellent.

Here are some of lines of yours that I really like:
"Yeah freedom's fine tastes sweet like wine," (maybe "tastes good as sweet wine")
"drifting apart, separated hearts,"
"It was good for a while, but then our smiles"
"Not half of a couple perpetually troubled"

How hard did you work to get those lines?

Just one small matter in wording I suggest changing:
Change the word me to myself in the line:
"I had to get away and find someplace where I could be me again,"

Well done. Good job.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6-w40-back-on-track-mp3/#post-303159