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(if you still want a copy, pm me your e-mail address :wink: )

cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-282425 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280983 Mon, 11 Feb 2008 00:47:10 +0000
If you do change anything on Isabel - Please don't discard this version.... (or send me a copy :D )....
I really LOVE it the way it is!

It couldn't be more perfect to me.... Dripping with FEELING over technical properness (is that a word? :P ).

Hmmm - I wasn't sure about there being a problem with how you said anything....
Then again, I can listen to The Velvet Underground with Nico on vocals ALL DAY! (Or night, as the case may be :twisted: )

Ken :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group CitiZenNoir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280983 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280973 Sun, 10 Feb 2008 23:13:03 +0000 glad you all like it (more or less) :D
vic, please, do have a go at it. and, of course, you're right, these are basic chords (but as you said I started finger-picking. always been a great challenge for me) and it is a rough demo, although not the first run-through :wink: (recording demos is essential for me or else I may forget what my scribbles for the music meant :wink: ). and please do lecture me on rhythm, inflections (not meaning grammar/suffixes here, are you?) and such! I am eager to learn! only I find it difficult to pick up all these things by myself and university doesn't help much with it.

thanks for the comments, everyone :lol:
cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280973 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280865 Sun, 10 Feb 2008 03:58:58 +0000
Couple of minor quibbles - you're still just using very basic chords, although you have moved on to fingerpicking - but there are too many pauses for comfort. The lyrics actually give a fragmented, stop/start feel - but the only real complaint I have is that the whole thing sounds under-rehearsed as you've recorded it.

It actuaally sounds like a very rough demo - but it also sounds like a very rough, first run-through. Does that make sense?

I know English isn't your first language - your written English is probably more grammatically correct than 95% of the rest of this site! - but if you're going to record in a foreign languange, you really need to study the RHYTHM of that language and how it's sung, rather than spelled. There are subtle nuances and inflections and cadences which don't come across that well in written speech....

Sheesh, I just realised I'm lecturing on English pronunciation - and with my broad Lancashire accent, anyone living more than 10 miles away needs a Babelfish......

Anne, would you mind if I had a go at this sometime this week? I'd try and use pretty much the same chords...I'll just record a rough demo and send it to you, see what you think?

It's a good song - it just needs a little tweaking!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280865 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280859 Sun, 10 Feb 2008 03:25:22 +0000
I love how you hold notes with your voice , then hit some very nice low register notes ..

Well done , the guitar sounded wonderful as well , you should record more in my opinion or is that me just being greedy :P

Well done

Cheers

Trev.. :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280859 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280017 Sun, 03 Feb 2008 01:34:07 +0000
I think, as Vic said of your last song (week 12) that you have indeed honed your songwriting.
These last few seem more coherent, or.... consistent throughout, while retaining your usually
vivid and expressive imagery.

I think this one is my (new) favorite, especially after listening to the Mp3.
As Pearl said - Beautiful :wink:

I really liked your singing.
The arrangement was REALLY GOOD!
I loved the way you ended the verses (musically).

Someday, I may ask your permission to do my own version of this one.

Keep up the Great work!

Ken]]> Sunday Songwriters Group CitiZenNoir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280017 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280016 Sun, 03 Feb 2008 00:52:53 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group pearlthekat https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-280016 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-30114 Sat, 02 Feb 2008 18:52:45 +0000 here
(oh, and somehow the lo-fi version is the only one working right lately)

Isabel

through a sugar cane field
i still roam in search for you
but the birds, they take to the sky
at random now

and the voice of the rain
in my ear
is like a call home on a dead telephone

the past in the windows
i see death in every shadow

your steps before our house
where the dust never settled
were washed away last night
as i lay on my mattress

with a dream wherein
you walked with me
a tiny alley in this labyrinthine city

until it dissolved
and the hollow sky bore me down

spin the prism
spin it one more time
spin the prism
where the light pours in

when it's darkling
i see the rainbow lingering
on a concrete wall

it may seem a bit confusing, but it does have meaning :wink: it's inspired by daniel mason's beautiful novel "a far country".. therein, an Isabel is looking for her brother and moves from trusting her instincts/visions and finding comfort in dreams to a point, where she is no longer sure if these things mean anything. in a nutshell :D
hope you like it as much as I do! (of course, the recording as well as the singing and playing could be better, but there were times when they have also been worse.. thus, I am very happy :lol: )

cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week13-isabel/#post-30114